The following is a letter to the head of the tourism bureau on the island of Tria."Erosion of beach sand along the shores of Tria Island is a serious threat to our island and our tourist industry. In order to stop the erosion, we should charge people for
The following argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on the unwarranted assumption that raising money for replenishing the sand, will result in reducing the buildings' risk, along the shore, of additional damage from severe storms, rendering its conclusion that, Tria's tourist industry will improve over the long term, invalid.
The argument fails to provide any justification as to how replenishing the sand will help to protect buildings along the shores of Tria, as was done to protect buildings on the nearby island of Batia. The writer provides no information justifying the relation between the island of Bhatia and Tria's shore. Nothing is known about the previous condition of Batia island, additionally, it's primary purpose was to protect the building nearby. On the contrary, the primary purpose, as mentioned, for Tria shore is to stop soil erosion of beach sand, which a serious threat to the island and not to save buildings from severe storms. Had the argument provide information regarding the correlation between both the places, Batia and Tria. Even then, the argument would have to further prove that, as to how replenishing the sand that helped protecting buildings in Batia, would impact with the same intensity in the case of Tria island.
The argument also leaves many unanswered questions. The assumption made by the writer that charging people for using the beaches will annoy a few tourists in the short term, but it will help raise money for replenishing the sand, leaves a lot of space for doubt. It is possible that because of the assumed annoyance, visitors develop a feeling an aversion towards the island and therefore, improving Tria's tourist industry, which is the main purpose, remains worthless.
Finally, the argument claims without a warrant that replenishing the beach sand will help protect buildings along the shores, thereby reducing these buildings' risk of additional damage from severe storms. Firstly, it is not mentioned how buildings were damaged earlier. Secondly, it is not necessary that after having a budget and replenishing the beach sand along the shore, it will help in protecting the buildings against storms, a natural calamity that has capricious results. This plan needs serious consideration of many other factors which would, perhaps, be more damaging to the buildings, before executing it. The argument is still lacking because it doesn't provide the information regarding tourists, visiting the island, frequently or occasionally, in what numbers and percentage and how will all of these if implemented successfully, help in improving the tourism industry.
In general, it may be said that the writer has failed to make a convincing argument because of a lack of information regarding the Tria island and its tourists. Also, it is based on several unwarranted assumptions. Then the argument ends with an entirely optimistic conclusion based on wishy-washy observations, that are likely to be incorrect.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 476 350
No. of Characters: 2463 1500
No. of Different Words: 216 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.671 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.174 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.737 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 193 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 150 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 66 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.053 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.848 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.737 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.08 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 835, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to protect' or 'protect'.
Suggestion: to protect; protect
...o how replenishing the sand that helped protecting buildings in Batia, would impact with t...
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Line 7, column 661, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...he argument is still lacking because it doesnt provide the information regarding touri...
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Line 7, column 812, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this if' or 'these ifs'?
Suggestion: this if; these ifs
...bers and percentage and how will all of these if implemented successfully, help in impro...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, as to, in general, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2538.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 475.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34315789474 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82020882903 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490526315789 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 765.0 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.6602866021 57.8364921388 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.578947368 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15789473684 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257123261593 0.218282227539 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859552526465 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729150214544 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146212673477 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0683117507335 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 98.500998004 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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