The following is a letter from the parent of a private school student to the principal of that school:
Last year, Kensington Academy turned over management of its cafeteria to a private vendor, Swift Nutrition. This company serves low-fat, low-calorie meals that students do not find enjoyable – my son and several of his friends came home yesterday complaining about the lunch options. While the intent of hiring Swift may have been to cause students to eat healthier foods, the plan is just going to cause students to bring their own, less healthy lunches instead of eating cafeteria food. If Swift is not replaced with another vendor, there will be serious health consequences for Kensington students.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
Food plays a very important part in overall development during a child's growth as well as adults. The argument states that, since the inception of Swift Nutrition students have been reluctant to eat food at the cafeteria which will eventually gender negative effects to the health of Kensington students.
Before Swift Nutrition was awarded the contract, parents did not face any complaints from the students about the cafeteria. Most of the students did not carry lunch boxes. But since a year, after Swift Nutrition took over, there has been a rise in the demand of lunch boxes. On talking with other parents, the mentioned reasons were concluded. Also it has come to attention, most of the students have lost weight in this one year which was not previously observed. Is this weight loss a cause due to change in cafeteria vendor? If, the answer is yes, then it is definitely reasonable to demand a change in vendor, in absence of which, the health of the students will suffer.
What is the geographical location of the Kensington Academy? What is the diet pattern of its habitat? The answers to this question can help better evaluate the argument. If it so happens that Kensington Academy is located at a place where it mostly snows throughout the year and where the diet followed happens to be of high fat, high calorie and high protein, then the basis of this argument seems reasonable. A high fat, high calorie diet of the habitats is essential to overcome and survive the cold weather conditions. Also a drastic change in the staple diet will naturally induce feelings of discontent in the new foodstuffs. Ultimately, he children will refrain from eating the new diet. Loss in food consumption is definitely hurt the child's health and thus a demand for change in vendor should be accepted.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
..., the mentioned reasons were concluded. Also it has come to attention, most of the s...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...nd survive the cold weather conditions. Also a drastic change in the staple diet wil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, thus, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1497.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 307.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87622149837 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59485050805 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543973941368 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.6486033293 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0588235294 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0588235294 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76470588235 5.70786347227 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174456884076 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523613576956 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0370769185624 0.0701772020484 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106175594349 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037904345758 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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