The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants.
"Recently, butter has been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. This change, however, has had little impact on our customers. In fact, only about 2 percent of customers have complained, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers do not distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine."
education is something which can be a boon or a bane depending on how we use it. Anything in excess is always harmful. In fact, education can help us pave a clear path for the future or it can leave us comepletely clueless. In the above statement the author says that formal education restricts our thinking capabilities. I strongly agree with him for the following two reasons.
While formal education can show us the ropes to a comfortable living, it can also lead us to a vicious cycle of an endless puzzle. For example, we can use formal education as a stepping stone in are life but it shouldn't be our entire life. we need to know where should we put a full stop to the quest of learning. formal education helps us in following basic practices like communication and behaviour. but a person should follow his or her passion to live a happy and fruitful life. A person who loves painting and wants to be a painter does not require a master's degree in Biomechanics he just needs to know basic English to sell his art.
people these days think education is very vital for their survial and they keep on pursuing multiple degrees to keep up with the always updating world. it is a very toxic and unhealthy process as they do not know when can they stop. In 1980s nuclear energy was booming so many people pursed chemical engineering degrees, but in 1990s the Fukushima attack happened and world government's interest on nuclear degree diminished so people with a chemical engineering major had no work so they started learning coding to enter the software game. we do not know what is going to happen in the future. If we follow our passion we can create our own niche and have a happy life.
education should only be used to know how to lead a healthy lifestyle. it should not traumatize your mental and physical well-being. so people should on stress themselves out by chasing flashy degrees and picture perfect grades. A research study has shown that people who pursue degrees what they like are mentally and financially in a better place than people who do degree just cause it is in trend. people who pursue degrees cause they want to stay updated with the world are not as hungry as people who pursue it cause that particular degree is their passion and they tend to burn out pretty quickly and are not even happy doing it.
In conclusion, education is necessary for survival but it should not be vicious unending maze. it needs to be regulated and people can easily find success even though they do not have a formal education or a fancy degree because they have learnt about life than chase a fancy degree. For all the above reasons I strongly agree with the author's claim that formal education restricts us in way and we rather need to follow our heart of a better mind.
Comments
e-rater score report
wrong topics
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 501 350
No. of Characters: 2250 1500
No. of Different Words: 237 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.731 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.491 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.422 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 160 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.784 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.582 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.165 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Education
education is something which can be a boon or a b...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ith him for the following two reasons. While formal education can show us the r...
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Line 2, column 230, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
... as a stepping stone in are life but it shouldnt be our entire life. we need to know whe...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 259, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...ife but it shouldnt be our entire life. we need to know where should we put a full...
^^
Line 2, column 333, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Formal
...t a full stop to the quest of learning. formal education helps us in following basic p...
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Line 2, column 422, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...tices like communication and behaviour. but a person should follow his or her passi...
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Line 2, column 574, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a master' or simply 'masters'?
Suggestion: a master; masters
... wants to be a painter does not require a masters degree in Biomechanics he just needs to...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o know basic English to sell his art. people these days think education is ver...
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Line 3, column 16, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
...glish to sell his art. people these days think education is very vita...
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Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...keep up with the always updating world. it is a very toxic and unhealthy process a...
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Line 3, column 249, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'In the 1980s'.
Suggestion: In the 1980s
...as they do not know when can they stop. In 1980s nuclear energy was booming so many peop...
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Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1990s'.
Suggestion: in the 1990s
...ursed chemical engineering degrees, but in 1990s the Fukushima attack happened and world...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 521, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to code'.
Suggestion: to code
...or had no work so they started learning coding to enter the software game. we do not k...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 556, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...ning coding to enter the software game. we do not know what is going to happen in ...
^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e our own niche and have a happy life. education should only be used to know ho...
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Line 4, column 14, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Education
...he and have a happy life. education should only be used to know how to lead...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 65, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hould only be used to know how to lead a healthy lifestyle. it should not traumat...
^^
Line 4, column 85, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... know how to lead a healthy lifestyle. it should not traumatize your mental and p...
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Line 4, column 147, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ze your mental and physical well-being. so people should on stress themselves out ...
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Line 4, column 416, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
...ho do degree just cause it is in trend. people who pursue degrees cause they want to s...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 531, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'causes'?
Suggestion: causes
...e not as hungry as people who pursue it cause that particular degree is their passion...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y and are not even happy doing it. In conclusion, education is necessary fo...
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Line 7, column 108, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...it should not be vicious unending maze. it needs to be regulated and people can ea...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 11.1786427146 197% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 28.8173652695 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2288.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 500.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.576 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45749791455 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 204.123752495 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.9761238749 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3333333333 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.79166666667 5.70786347227 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 5.25449101796 438% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.20758483034 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0300905214362 0.218282227539 14% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0111857983808 0.0743258471296 15% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0222161281205 0.0701772020484 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0186275225545 0.128457276422 15% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00912418127371 0.0628817314937 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 48.3550499002 141% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 12.5979740519 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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