The following is a memorandum from the business manager of television station."Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increasingly more time to covering national news and less time to covering weather and local news. During the same t

The problem, mentioned in the passage, I think, is important for this particular company, because it may result in a decline in revenues of the television station, due to the fact of the canceled contracts and possible loss of viewers. Before giving a reasonable solution to the issues, the cause-effect relationship should be quiestioned. This means that it should be investigated wheather the cacelation of contracts and possible loss of customers is caused by the shortage of time, devoted to weather and local news.

The first step to understanding the problem of the possible decline of customers is the analysis of the complaints. It is essential to investigate their structure. This means that the company should understand wheather the complains concern a particular program or a range of programms. It may be possible that the customers are not satisfied with the coverage of weather and local news in general. In this case the television station should seriously take the customer's opinions into consideration.

Another point, related to the structure of complaints, is their number, recieved by the company. It can vary seriously from minor ones to greater quantities. In the latter case it is mandatory for the station to reconsider their programms and offer a well-organized one.

In case of the loss of advertisers there are questions, other than the program, to be answered. The decline in contracts may be the case of stringent price policy or severe competition in the field. The rival companies may seem more appealing from the prospective of advertisemet prices, and this is a major question giving rise to further analysis. If it turned out that the above mentioned question is the reason of the decline, the company should reconsider its price policy.

To conclude, I would like to say that the analysis of real cause-effect is the furhter step needed to understand the case, mentioned in the passage, and take actions towards the solution of the problem.

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Average: 6.1 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 109, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er, recieved by the company. It can vary seriously from minor ones to greater qua...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, so, well, i think, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1660.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 323.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13931888545 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99494281195 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479876160991 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1047701937 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.75 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1875 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8125 5.70786347227 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104125369056 0.218282227539 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0340057178392 0.0743258471296 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502099452948 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0526721862051 0.128457276422 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422945459046 0.0628817314937 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Sentence: Before giving a reasonable solution to the issues, the cause-effect relationship should be quiestioned.
Error: quiestioned Suggestion: questioned

Sentence: This means that it should be investigated wheather the cacelation of contracts and possible loss of customers is caused by the shortage of time, devoted to weather and local news.
Error: wheather Suggestion: whether
Error: cacelation Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: This means that the company should understand wheather the complains concern a particular program or a range of programms.
Error: wheather Suggestion: whether

Sentence: Another point, related to the structure of complaints, is their number, recieved by the company.
Error: recieved Suggestion: received

Sentence: The rival companies may seem more appealing from the prospective of advertisemet prices, and this is a major question giving rise to further analysis.
Error: advertisemet Suggestion: advertisement

Sentence: To conclude, I would like to say that the analysis of real cause-effect is the furhter step needed to understand the case, mentioned in the passage, and take actions towards the solution of the problem.
Error: furhter Suggestion: further

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argument 1 and argument 2 can put together

argument 3 -- OK
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flaws:
Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:

Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 323 350
No. of Characters: 1618 1500
No. of Different Words: 147 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.239 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.009 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.91 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.188 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.391 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.375 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.316 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.039 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5