The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company.
"According a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising."
In this given statement, author claims that just lack of proper advertisement fewer people attended the Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. To support this arguement, other has given many vague explanations and author also made the conclusion on the basis of assumptions without any proper proof. In the conclusion which is given at the end of the arguement has several flaws and loopholes.
Firstly, author depicts that a recent report from Super Screen Movie Production marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. First there are so many reasons behind the curtain that fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies because according to the author rather than last year, most of the audience attended all the movies. So that means it might be possible that the content of the movie of last year that had been produced by Super Screen is not that much impressive like other movies of them. Rather than that it might be possible that at that time another fabulous movie also has come to the market that most of the audience might be watched that movie rather than Super Screen produced movie.
Secondly, author claims that the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. This is but obvious that as we have seen above last movie of Super Screen has been watched least as compare to other Super Screen movies then the number of reviews of that movie also must be less. Then there are chances that the percentage of positive reviews might be more as compare to negative reviews because we all know that we cannot judge the reviews by the percent only. For an example, as we know last Super Screen movie was watched least as compare to others then it might be possible that these movie has been watched by only those person who are biased with this production movie only through that in the reviews it might possible that number of reviews could definitely be increased.
Lastly in the conclusion, as we have seen all the parameters thouroghly they made me to conclude that we cannot say that due to lack of peoper advertisement last movie of Super Screen movie has been watched the least as compare to other movies of this company. So we can say that author has given the conclusion on the basis of assumptions without giving the proper proof, because as author claims that the last movie of Super Screen was quite awesome than before than author would must see that movie without any doubt.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 439 350
No. of Characters: 2104 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.577 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.793 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.346 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.769 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.519 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.846 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.476 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.675 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.311 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 408, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...f the audience attended all the movies. So that means it might be possible that the con...
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Line 9, column 434, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ntage of positive reviews might be more as compare to negative reviews because we ...
^^
Line 9, column 660, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this movie' or 'these movies'?
Suggestion: this movie; these movies
...o others then it might be possible that these movie has been watched by only those person w...
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Line 9, column 697, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this person' or 'those people', 'those persons'?
Suggestion: this person; those people; those persons
...at these movie has been watched by only those person who are biased with this production mov...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 27.0 13.6137724551 198% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2145.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 439.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8861047836 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38802392092 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.375854214123 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 650.7 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.7421065073 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.0 119.503703932 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.7692307692 23.324526521 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76923076923 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.408591883813 0.218282227539 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.194386824952 0.0743258471296 262% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.167203055048 0.0701772020484 238% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263411951668 0.128457276422 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136788704444 0.0628817314937 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 14.3799401198 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 48.3550499002 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 98.500998004 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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