In the preceding argument, the author states that the best project is to open a jazz music club in Monroe city, the conclusion of the argument is based on the following premises. Firstly, he bolsters his argument by mention a nearest jazz club away from the Monroe city 60 miles and he states that around 100.000 people attended monroe's jazz festival last summer, moreover, several will known jazz musicians live in Monreo's, further, he states that around $1.000 people spend on jazz shows. Finally a recent study in monreo city indicates that C Note will make money.
To begin with, the argument states that monreo city has to build a C Note club because its very profitable enterprise, but the author fails to assume that the both areas are the same, but it could be the significant differences in the near town is the cause of jazz club success. Perhaps, the jazz club is successful because it is a part from big festival, or perhaps due to presence the jazz musician that enhance the popularity of the jazz music. Hence,the assumption without basis and in order to support his position he has to provide more information.
Secondly, the author readily states that the jazz project will be profitable enterprise, but to be convincing, several question would need to answered. Firstly, we would need to know how he assumed that this project will be profitable? But more than this, we would need to know what he means in using "profitable enterprise. In other words how much is the revenue to say it is a profitable project? All these question the author has to answer in order to boost his assumption.
Thirdly, he claims that people spend $1000 on jazz entertainment, but how the author knows that all people spends this money just on jazz shows, perhaps they spend money on other activities while there are a lot of activities in the festival. Moreover, from where he concluded the number? What types of statistics he used? Hence, the author fails to provide evidence to strengthen his assumption.
Last but not least, the argument claims that there is a recent study indicates that applying this project will make money. In deed, there are multifarious factors that remains elusive and intractable, such as who makes the study? Is it representative enough to draw a broad conclusion? What kind of demographic data they used? All these factors play a major role to extrapolate the results. In other words, he fails to mention the controlling variables to conclude the assumption.
In conclusion, the argument fails to provide one key factor. Namely, all the previous assumptions are equivocal. Therefore, without answering all the questions the argument is unsubstantiated and opened to debate.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 456 350
No. of Characters: 2184 1500
No. of Different Words: 204 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.621 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.789 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.573 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.923 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.708 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.282 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.527 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.154 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 225, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...ly, he bolsters his argument by mention a nearest jazz club away from the Monroe ...
^
Line 1, column 388, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[3]
Message: Did you mean 'know' or 'be known'?
Suggestion: know; be known
...val last summer, moreover, several will known jazz musicians live in Monreos, further...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 490, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...around .000 people spend on jazz shows. Finally a recent study in monreo city indicates...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 455, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
... the popularity of the jazz music. Hence,the assumption without basis and in order ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 488, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... Hence,the assumption without basis and in order to support his position he has ...
^^
Line 5, column 112, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun question seems to be countable; consider using: 'several questions'.
Suggestion: several questions
...table enterprise, but to be convincing, several question would need to answered. Firstly, we wou...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 24, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s assumption. Thirdly, he claims that people spend 000 on jazz entertainment, ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, then, therefore, third, thirdly, while, as to, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2260.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 455.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96703296703 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7449484842 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47032967033 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 73.0073127045 57.8364921388 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1666666667 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9583333333 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41666666667 5.70786347227 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223879159842 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0515265959891 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0732415692278 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109307383536 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0990762513919 0.0628817314937 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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