While it may be true that the consumption of the sea food dishes in Bay city increased by 30 percent during the past five years due to different assumptions. The author argument does not make a cogent case for the consumption rising. It is easy to understand why people have been increased consumption. But the argument does not state the credibility and is not strong enough to lead to increased the consumption percentage
Citing a sale study of bay city residents, the author reports a bay city residents love sea food dishes, it is not clear, however, the scope and the validity of the study for example, the study could asked if they prefer seafood or the other food types in general, the sample may not be representative, valid, and reliable, it can not be used to effectively break the author argument. Wording the study result remain vague and ambiguous.
Additionally, the author implies that there is no specialized seafood restaurants, so it might be a small portion from the general food types they offer. Moreover, the concrete connection between the families income and using a vague word like major with seafood dishes rising is not effectively made.
Building upon the implication about the Bay's do not like cooking meals at their homes does not reflect that is mandatory that the only food they eat or buy is the sea food. Nonetheless, the author mention the Bay's prefer to eat healthy food and it is a possible true assumption, but by presence of a famous chief that relays on flavors and different food colors to attract the people makes the arguments implausible to expect the increased.
Examining all the various angles and factors involved improving the consumption percentage. The argument does not justify the increase, while the proposal assumption does high light a possibility. More information is required to warrant the truth.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the arguments are not on the right track.
Here goes a sample:
https://www.testbig.com/gmatgre-essays/recent-sales-study-indicates-con…
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 312 350
No. of Characters: 1516 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.203 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.859 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.652 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.641 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.637 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.054 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While it may be true that the consumption of ...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 376, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the credibility and is not strong enough to lead to increased the consumption per...
^^
Line 1, column 425, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to increased the consumption percentage Citing a sale study of bay city resident...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 74, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'resident'?
Suggestion: resident
...esidents, the author reports a bay city residents love sea food dishes, it is not clear, ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 201, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'ask'
Suggestion: ask
... the study for example, the study could asked if they prefer seafood or the other foo...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 201, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'families'' or 'family's'?
Suggestion: families'; family's
...er, the concrete connection between the families income and using a vague word like majo...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, so, while, for example, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 55.5748502994 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1559.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 312.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99679487179 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77341023342 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548076923077 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 122.88669126 57.8364921388 212% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 129.916666667 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195467985251 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625837247424 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0784258399473 0.0701772020484 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100344824811 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0748389271066 0.0628817314937 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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