In the preceding argument the author claims that they have to replace the manned space flight with the unmanned one, the conclusion is based on the following premises. Firstly, he states that the manned flight is costly and dangerous. Secondly, he claims that the unmanned flight more effective in the data collection without cost and risks with sending men and women into space. Thirdly, they have to invest their resources in unmanned space flight. Hence, in the first glance it may seem plausible. However, careful scrutiny sheds light on plethora of assumption that could undermine the value of the argument.
To begin with, the author readily sates that they have to replace the manned flight with the unmanned one, and he supports his position by stating that the manned one is costly and dangerous, but the truth that he fails to provide evidence from where he conclude the first assumption. Perhaps the both flights are costly with different money distribution and both of them dangerous in different ways, so we do not have enough information about the exact cost of the flights, and the shape of dangerous. so, the assumption lack the depth in order to bolster the argument.
Secondly, the author assumes that the unmanned space flight is more effective than the manned one because they are able to collect data from the space without any risks and cost, but the flaws here that compering a human kind work with automatic system raises a big debate because the unmanned flight has designed for specific numbers of roles and duties in contrast the human being, are able to convey myriad of information, personal experiences and their feeling out side the earth. Thus, the author fails again to warrant his position.
Thirdly, the author recommends to invest more money on the unmanned flight but he fails to describe how they regulate their budget, what about their in come or revenue, and what is a plan they use in order to improve their performance. So, there are a lot of facts we do not know about their economic status and without these facts the recommendation is not reliable.
In conclusion, the author fails to mention one key factors. Namely, all the previous assumptions lack the reality and depth to support the argument. Hence, without complete information the argument is unsubstantiated and opened to debate.
Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 392 350
No. of Characters: 1898 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.45 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.842 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.421 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.133 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.353 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.867 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.587 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.147 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 255, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'concludes'.
Suggestion: concludes
...fails to provide evidence from where he conclude the first assumption. Perhaps the both ...
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Line 3, column 504, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...he flights, and the shape of dangerous. so, the assumption lack the depth in order...
^^
Line 5, column 466, Rule ID: OUT_SIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'outside'?
Suggestion: outside
... personal experiences and their feeling out side the earth. Thus, the author fails again...
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Line 7, column 21, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommends investing'.
Suggestion: recommends investing
...nt his position. Thirdly, the author recommends to invest more money on the unmanned flight but h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, in conclusion, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.9520958084 15% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1954.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 392.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98469387755 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51463334961 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479591836735 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 111.459563856 57.8364921388 193% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.125 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1875 5.70786347227 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179171206508 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614193355552 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693832861079 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0982951286416 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0790731796546 0.0628817314937 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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