Hospital statistics regarding people who go to
the emergency room after roller-skating accidents
indicate the need for more protective equipment.
Within that group of people, 75 percent of those
who had accidents in streets or parking lots had
not been wearing any protective clothing (helmets,
knee pads, etc.) or any light-reflecting material
(clip-on lights, glow-in-the-dark wrist pads, etc.).
Clearly, the statistics indicate that by investing
in high-quality protective gear and reflective
equipment, roller skaters will greatly reduce their
risk of being severely injured in an accident.
In many roller skating accidents the person
injured is not wearing appropriate protective
equipment. The statement assumes that the cause
of the accident was the injured persons lack of
high-quality protective gear and reflective
equipment. The statment does not address the fact
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that accidents can occur and injuries may result
even if a person does have the appropraite highquality protective gear and reflective equipment.
The hospital statistics does show that 25%
of those injured in roller-skating accidents in
a street or parking lot were wearing some form
of protective clothing although they were still
injured. This shows that their is a 1 in 4 chance
that someone wearing protective equipment will
stil be injured if involved in an accident. The
arguement depends purely on assumptions that
the accidents that roller-skaters are involved in
are minor and not life threatening. The their was
a greater amount of life-threateing injuries such as
roller-skater verses automobile, the fact that they
wore protective equipment would be of little help
to the injured person.
More analysis would need to be done before
deciding if the high-quality protective gear and
reflective equipment would greatly reduce the risk
of being severly injured in an accident. One must
consider what types of accidents roller-skaters are
most likely to get into and weither they would be injured despite the fact that they wear protective
equipment.
Comments
e-rater score report
No. of Words: 227 350
Minimum 250 words wanted
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 227 350
No. of Characters: 1202 1500
No. of Different Words: 120 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.882 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.295 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.997 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 90 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.513 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.469 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.469 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...tective gear and reflective equipment. The hospital statistics does show that 25% ...
^^^
Line 14, column 26, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...ey were still injured. This shows that their is a 1 in 4 chance that someone wearin...
^^^^^
Line 19, column 37, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'The' or 'their'?
Suggestion: The; Their
...in are minor and not life threatening. The their was a greater amount of life-threatein...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, still, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 55.5748502994 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1275.0 2260.96107784 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 227.0 441.139720559 51% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.61674008811 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 4.56307096286 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04142194269 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 204.123752495 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537444933921 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 379.8 705.55239521 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.481713754 57.8364921388 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 141.666666667 119.503703932 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2222222222 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 28.0 5.15768463074 543% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193055070713 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974706701966 0.0743258471296 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597540573509 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0581444467953 0.128457276422 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610450116914 0.0628817314937 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 14.3799401198 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.3550499002 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.5979740519 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 98.500998004 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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