An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation
The author has given a recommendation in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverushed nation of Tagus. Although the author's heart might be in the right place, the recommendation given by the author raises a few key questions and without the correct answer to these questions, the feasibility of the recommendation cannot be determined. The following paragraphs will elaborate more on these questions.
The author states that the seeds for the new breed of millet which is high in vitamin A costs more but the farmers will be given subsidies for farming this new variety of millet. But what the author fails to answer is that even after the subsidies, is the quality of the grain good enough to generate enough profits for the farmers to continue farming this new breed ? This question arises because since the cost of the seed is higher, naturally they will be sold at a higher price than the normal millet. Since the nation of Tagus is already impoverished, the question to be answered is that will the people of Tagus be able to afford this new type of millet even if they know that it is good for their health ?
The author further mentions that since millet is the staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. But the author doesn't mention anything about the taste of this new variety of millet. Even though it is just a new breed of the same crop, there might be differences in the way that it tastes. So will the people of Tagus readily accept and adopt the new variety of millet even if it doesnt taste the same and is not like the staple food that they are used to ?
Apart from this, the author has mentioned that this new breed of millet is high in vitamin A. But the author doesn't mention anything about it's compatibility with the body. Since this new breed is engineered, has enough testing be done so that we know for sure that consuming this new breed will not affect the people of Tagus in a negative way ?
These questions prove to be pivotal in the determining if the recommendation made by the author is feasible to be implemented in the impoverished nation of Tagus or not. Hence the answers to these questions will help in evaluating the recommendation.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 397 350
No. of Characters: 1792 1500
No. of Different Words: 158 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.464 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.514 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.506 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 68 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.135 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.398 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.637 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 140, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...overushed nation of Tagus. Although the authors heart might be in the right place, the ...
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Line 4, column 87, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A cost' or simply 'costs'?
Suggestion: A cost; Costs
...reed of millet which is high in vitamin A costs more but the farmers will be given subs...
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Line 6, column 134, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...y adopt the new variety. But the author doesnt mention anything about the taste of thi...
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Line 6, column 402, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...pt the new variety of millet even if it doesnt taste the same and is not like the stap...
^^^^^^
Line 8, column 110, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...et is high in vitamin A. But the author doesnt mention anything about its compatibilit...
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Line 8, column 327, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...eed will not affect the people of Tagus in a negative way ? These questions prove to be pivota...
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Line 10, column 171, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...he impoverished nation of Tagus or not. Hence the answers to these questions will hel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, so, apart from
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1832.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 395.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63797468354 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57074939611 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.407594936709 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 571.5 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8205765096 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.5 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6875 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.875 5.70786347227 33% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.449601326131 0.218282227539 206% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169421546831 0.0743258471296 228% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122687138232 0.0701772020484 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246931734308 0.128457276422 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120121788964 0.0628817314937 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 12.5979740519 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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