An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The thesis suggests that an international organization has developed a new breed of miles which is high in vitamin A ,which would help nation such as Tagus where there is deficiency of vitamin A among the people. It is suggested that the government of Tagus should do everything to promote this new type of millet. Before taking any decision government of Tagus should considered following 2 questions in mind.
First of all Tagus is an impoverished nation which surely tells that Tagus is not one of the nations which are developed, and also this international organization stated that this particular new type fo millet would cost more thus government surely needs to take consideration of economy, whether they could afford it, also question such as is the vitamin A deficiency is top priority among other problems faced by the people of Tagus? Is there any other problems which need more economy and more prioritize than this deficiency.
Furthermore , in thesis it stated that millet is already a staple food in Tagus thus which leads that people will readily adopt the new variety of millet. Different nations have their staple food , there can be more than one staple food for a nation, thus as millet is a staple food in Tagus that alone factor would not help people to readily adopt the new variety, many other factor depends such as the production, taste, weather conditions to grow and many more thus concluding that as millet been a staple food won't necessary make people readily adopt the new variety.
Thus above questions must be answer for promoting the new type of millet, also government should survey whether that organization has any profital interest by doing so, also is deficiency of vitamin A is a serious challenge faced by people of Tagus, can Government of Tagus economically bring this new breed to its nations. Such question needs to be considered by the government before making a decision.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 325 350
No. of Characters: 1573 1500
No. of Different Words: 136 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.246 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.84 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.613 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 69 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.563 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.466 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.705 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.166 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 117, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...reed of miles which is high in vitamin A ,which would help nation such as Tagus wh...
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Line 1, column 316, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ing to promote this new type of millet. Before taking any decision government of Tagus...
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Line 5, column 12, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ze than this deficiency. Furthermore , in thesis it stated that millet is alre...
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Line 5, column 196, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...Different nations have their staple food , there can be more than one staple food ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...eople readily adopt the new variety. Thus above questions must be answer for prom...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, so, thus, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 324.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95061728395 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66629183008 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447530864198 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 22.8473053892 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 135.24664255 57.8364921388 234% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 178.222222222 119.503703932 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.0 23.324526521 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423868742578 0.218282227539 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.184353690134 0.0743258471296 248% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11378979664 0.0701772020484 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274668009156 0.128457276422 214% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535585737677 0.0628817314937 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.9 14.3799401198 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.94 48.3550499002 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.197005988 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 12.3882235529 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 11.1389221557 147% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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