An international development organization in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A While seeds for this new type of millet cost more farmers will be paid | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.

An international development organization, concludes that
to overcome the deficiency of vitamin A, the government of
Tagus should do everything to promote the new engineered
millet among the citizen of Tagus. The argument is not
persuasive and it is not logically right. The organization has
not suported the argumnet with proper facts and figures.

The organization claims that there is a deficiency of vitamin
A among the citizen of Tagus. The flaw in the statment
would be that we do not know how many citizen are having
a deficiency, what age group of people are having it. It
could also happen that the organization only took the
sample from elderly and they could have deficiency of
vitamin A due to some medicine which they are taking. The
organization should take a survey and provide us with a
proper data. Unless, we do not have a proper data, the
government should not start promoting the new type of
millet.

Secondly, the organization claims that as the millet is
already the staple food of people in Tagus, citizen would
eaisly adapt it. It could happen that the food which is made
from new type of millet does not taste good. This could be
a loss for the farmers as no one would buy from them in
the future and the subsidies which are provided would go
to waste. It could also happen that there are some side
effects of eating this new engineered millet. The
organization has not provided us with any type of
certificate that the food grain is safe for consumption and
there is no harmful side effects on the human. It could be
risky to promote stuff without knowing its effects. If
something happens than the government is held
responsible for it.

Thirldy, it could happen that the new engineered millet
consumes more nutrients from the soil, making the soil
unfertile. To keep the soil fertility, the farmers would have
to used more fertilizers which increase the cost and it is
harmful for the health. Unless, the organization ensures
that the new millet does not required more nutrients to
grow, the farmer should not accept it.

The international development organization should provide
with all the data and should ensure that the new
engineered millet are safe for consumptions and do not
have any side effects. They shoud also confirm that the soil
would not become unfertile using the new seeds. Unless,
the organization provies with proper response, and the
doubts are not clear, the government should not promote
the new type of millet.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...umnet with proper facts and figures. The organization claims that there is a def...
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Line 9, column 31, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... vitamin A among the citizen of Tagus. The flaw in the statment would be that we ...
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Line 10, column 34, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun citizen seems to be countable; consider using: 'many citizens'.
Suggestion: many citizens
...tment would be that we do not know how many citizen are having a deficiency, what age grou...
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Line 40, column 30, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'require'
Suggestion: require
...n ensures that the new millet does not required more nutrients to grow, the farmer sho...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, second, secondly, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2136.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 424.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03773584906 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63026582816 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.39858490566 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 647.1 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 21.0 8.76447105788 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9853687737 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.714285714 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1904761905 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.42857142857 5.70786347227 25% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 44.0 5.15768463074 853% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354104493317 0.218282227539 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113741052504 0.0743258471296 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0815468260157 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0849281865199 0.128457276422 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0839669286404 0.0628817314937 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, second, secondly, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments