With the advancements in technology, scientists have developed machines which can operate without the human presence. The argument states that manned space flights are costly and dangerous, however it does not mention how or why they came to this conclusion. The conclusion that we should invest our resources in unmanned space flight is based on the premise that a series of unmanned space probes and sattelites demonstarted that a great deal of useful information could be gathered without the risks associated with sending humans into space. This premise is weak and should have provided more insight into the information that were gathered.
First of all, the author has provided three reasons as to why the National aeronautics committee should invest their resources in unmanned space flight. The first reason is cost. Simply stating that manned space flights are costlier will not suffice. We need to be provided with exact statistical data before we make a decision of this magnitude. unmanned space flights maybe cheaper, but if the information they provide us with are not as reliable when compared to what we obtain in the case of a manned space flight, investing in unmanned spaced flight would be a nothing but a msitake. Even though the author mentioned "Useful information", we need to know the difference between the information obtained in both cases.
Second reason stated is the danger associated with it. There are several jobs in the world that come with occupational hazard. But this has never stopped us from developing ways to overcome such difficulties. If we never took risks and step out of our comfort zones, we would never have reached the level of technological advancement we have attained today. Furthermore, the author has not mentioned how manned space flights are dangerous. If we can find a way to work around this, this reason would be pointless.
The biggest leap in the argument is the assumption that a great deal of information can be gathered without the costs and risks associated with sending men and women into space. If observed closely, there are several unexplored variables in this assumption. What does great deal of useful information mean? What about costs not associated with sending humans aborad? We need to be provided with data as to how the information is useful. If a manned flight is able to provide more useful data, then might as well spend some extra money. We need to know abou tthe quality and the quantity of the data gathered by an unammed space flight. In addition to this, building an unmanned space flight will definitely have its expenses too. The author has not provided any sort of detail in this regard. If the cost of building an unmanned space flight is more costlier than that associated with sending men and women into space, investing resourcing in unmanned space flight would be a tremendous blunder.
To conclude, the author provides an interesting hypothesis which may or may not be true. But we cannot come to the conclusion that we should invest our resources in unmanned space flights based on this argument due to the above stated assumptions which cannot be overlooked. Unmanned space flights might just be the smarter choice but inorder to decide that we need to take into consideration all of the unexplored variables in the given argument.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The conclusion that we should invest our resources in unmanned space flight is based on the premise that a series of unmanned space probes and sattelites demonstarted that a great deal of useful information could be gathered without the risks associated with sending humans into space.
Error: sattelites Suggestion: satellites
Error: demonstarted Suggestion: demonstrated
Sentence: We need to be provided with exact statistical data before we make a decision of this magnitude. unmanned space flights maybe cheaper, but if the information they provide us with are not as reliable when compared to what we obtain in the case of a manned space flight, investing in unmanned spaced flight would be a nothing but a msitake.
Error: msitake Suggestion: mistake
Sentence: What about costs not associated with sending humans aborad?
Error: aborad Suggestion: aboard
Sentence: We need to know abou tthe quality and the quantity of the data gathered by an unammed space flight.
Error: abou Suggestion: about
Error: unammed Suggestion: unarmed
Error: tthe Suggestion: time
Sentence: Unmanned space flights might just be the smarter choice but inorder to decide that we need to take into consideration all of the unexplored variables in the given argument.
Error: inorder Suggestion: No alternate word
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samples:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 555 350
No. of Characters: 2726 1500
No. of Different Words: 233 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.854 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.912 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.585 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 197 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 139 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.821 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.943 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.288 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.449 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 348, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Unmanned
...e we make a decision of this magnitude. unmanned space flights maybe cheaper, but if the...
^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 846, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'costlier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: costlier
...of building an unmanned space flight is more costlier than that associated with sending men a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 394, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...that we need to take into consideration all of the unexplored variables in the given argum...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, second, so, then, well, as to, in addition, sort of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.9520958084 193% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2799.0 2260.96107784 124% => OK
No of words: 555.0 441.139720559 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04324324324 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85370353223 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70666016568 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427027027027 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 869.4 705.55239521 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.945655135 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5172413793 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1379310345 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.93103448276 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.67664670659 299% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.429604543541 0.218282227539 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125380788196 0.0743258471296 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119208740508 0.0701772020484 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.270626151715 0.128457276422 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139296768961 0.0628817314937 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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