Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered.
The author claims that if inoculation against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected, then many innocent lives might be saved. The author believes that there have been burgeon of deaths due to cow flu and had inoculation against this cow flu been routinely administered to all the people then many lives would be saved. This claim of author is not well-reasoned as there is a small possibilty that a person would die as a result of inoculations, hence inoculation against cow flu cannot be routinely administered.
At first, the author is assuming that lot of people have died due to cow flu and had inoculation against cow flu been routinely administered to all people then may lives could be saved is flawed. There would have been various other reasons such as vehicle accidents or cyclone, that accumalated a huge increase in number of deaths and the author is thinking cow flu to be the primary reason of enormous deaths. Hence, this claim of the author that lot of people have died due to cow flu and
inoculation against cow flu should be routinely administered does not stand true.
Further, the author is bilieveing that inoculation against cow flu should be routinely administeredas more deaths have resulted from only cow flu and this disease could widely spread to ther regions if precautions is not taken.
To summarise the author's claim that many lives would be saved if inoculation against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected is flawed. I believe that the argument would vastly improved if the author could provide enough evidence to support his claim. If the author shows some aunthentic proof that a huge population of people are infected of cow flu and inoculation against cow flu needs to be routinely administered.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 311 350
No. of Characters: 1507 1500
No. of Different Words: 120 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.199 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.846 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.712 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 70 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.1 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.069 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.588 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.734 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.234 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 219, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'burgeoned'.
Suggestion: burgeoned
...he author believes that there have been burgeon of deaths due to cow flu and had inocul...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 491, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t of people have died due to cow flu and inoculation against cow flu should be ro...
^^^
Line 6, column 229, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er regions if precautions is not taken. To summarise the authors claim that many...
^^^^^^
Line 8, column 227, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'improve'
Suggestion: improve
... believe that the argument would vastly improved if the author could provide enough evid...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, may, so, then, well, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1536.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 311.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93890675241 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75558386171 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 204.123752495 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.385852090032 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 492.3 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 29.2959041506 57.8364921388 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 153.6 119.503703932 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.1 23.324526521 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.475083228529 0.218282227539 218% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.272782256494 0.0743258471296 367% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154598536299 0.0701772020484 220% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.324540822353 0.128457276422 253% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101112600821 0.0628817314937 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 14.3799401198 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.3550499002 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 98.500998004 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 12.3882235529 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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