The author of the passage suggested that there’s an increasing demand for heating oil in the northeastern United States because of ongoing low temperature in that region. To give accurate advice to residents in the northeastern region, the author needs to provide additional information and assessments to valid his/her claim. The author’s argument can be weakened in three aspects: the forecasters’ accuracy, potential materials that can replace oil as the major fuel source, and the overall economic growth in the region.
The author should be aware that we should use forecasters as indicators and predictors, not promises. Indeed, with the developed technologies, humans are able to accurately predict weather within a week. The author said that the weather in northeastern United States will stay low for a few more years. They did not provide what is the percentage that this prediction is likely to happen. If such a statement is merely a suggestion, the author cannot use it as a reliable factual evidence to persuade the local communities to purchase more heating oil, as well as a reasonable indicator to foresee the increasing demand of fuel.
Secondly, the author also needs to exanimate potential substitute for the burning oil in that region. With the overall awakening awareness of climate change, many people have started to pay attention to adopt green energy in their community. Heating oil, from fossil fuel, is a traditional ingredient for energy generator. There are many emerging green energies that have been widely adopted across the globe. One of them, perhaps the most popular one, is solar energy. If the weather in the northeastern US has been sunny most of the time, the local communities are likely to adopt solar energy to reduce carbon emissions. To eliminate the market threat to burning oil, the author needs to make sure that green energy is unlikely to develop in the northeastern region of the States. The author may cite a counter-example such as the higher cost for installing green energy at home to strengthen their arguments.
The last but not the least, the author did not provide a tenet evidence for the incoming population growth trend. The author only mentioned that many new homes are being built in the region but they have failed to prove that how many people are actually moving in. Once the real estate market price goes higher, it is very likely to discourage people to move in. Therefore, less people are likely to purchase and invest in consolidated industries.
In sum, the author did not provide a comprehensive argument and failed to back his/her argument with convincing evidences. To make their arguments more precise and prudent, they need to be prepared and providing the following three criteria: the accuracy of the weather forecasters, eliminate the potential substitute energy sources in local communities, and the actual number of people who will move into the region with a stable real-estate market price.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 488 350
No. of Characters: 2435 1500
No. of Different Words: 230 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.7 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.99 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.69 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 194 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.684 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.318 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.306 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.306 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 116, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...r the incoming population growth trend. The author only mentioned that many new hom...
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Line 4, column 376, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...iscourage people to move in. Therefore, less people are likely to purchase and inves...
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Line 5, column 459, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...with a stable real-estate market price.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2515.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 486.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17489711934 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83130562717 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489711934156 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 813.6 705.55239521 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8598851448 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.318181818 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0909090909 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214611742237 0.218282227539 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631762954768 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473415089224 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114640908938 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586336501899 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 98.500998004 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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