Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.

Our minds and spirits alter how we perceive the world. There are many ways to improve our minds and spirits, such as friends and family, religion and spirituality, and education. Education is one of the most common ways to advance our knowledge and understanding of the world. The ways to pursue education can be categorized under formal education and informal education. Formal education varies in different counties. In highly developed countries, formal education systems are proven to have beneficial impacts on studying. But in countries that do not have a comprehensive education system, formal education systems somewhat limit the development of children’s minds. We should decide what type of education is best for our children based on their needs.

Informal education, such as home school, can be more personalized for students who have special needs. For example, students who express their talent in computer programming at early age should be allowed to devote their time in learning coding programs. For students who have discovered their interests and skills, informal education gives them more freedom than formal education can.

One shortcoming that formal education has is its monotonous exam system. Many developing countries have adopted formal education as their national standard education. To sift out the outstanding students, all students are required to take the same exam on all subjects to compete with each other. In China, the national college entry exam is called Gao Kao. Under the Chinese formal education system, students spend 12 years to prepare for Gao Kao and consider the test-taking skill to be the most important thing to learn. This institutional designed study system aims to select the best students from all, but it does not provide much creative space for students to explore other possibilities.

Formal education, on the other hand, has a universal beneficial effect on lifting up the entire population’s education level. Learning in a formal education system, students have the opportunities to discover what their passions are. For many students who feel undecided about their career paths, they can find an answer by taking courses on various subjects. Taking general classes also builds a foundation for students across majors to understand each other. If everyone only takes classes that speak to their interests, when they enter society, students will face challenges to communicate with people who hold a different point of view.

To sum up, the purpose of education is to nourish our minds and spirits. Education ignites our passion and gives us the tools to make innovation. There is no best way to pursue education. Both formal and informal education have their merits and vices. We should adopt the values from both forms of education and find what works best for us as individuals.

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Average: 7.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 239, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to code'.
Suggestion: to code
...llowed to devote their time in learning coding programs. For students who have discove...
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Line 7, column 584, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'communicating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: communicating
... society, students will face challenges to communicate with people who hold a different point ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, for example, such as, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 12.9106741573 232% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2413.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 453.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32671081678 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79651831655 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525386313466 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 748.8 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.5779391255 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3703703704 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7777777778 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.55555555556 5.21951772744 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212908493513 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764515323074 0.0831039109588 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634561874007 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131772683765 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0764092765707 0.0667264976115 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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