It might seem logical, at first glance, that the movie producer states to the head of the movie studio, that they have to increase the fund on the movie working by 10 percent in order to enhance the movies quality, and this request depends on the new director do not have the experience that will improve the movies production. and the main reasone for that his past experience was in the shampo advertisments and change his domine will lead to consume more time from actors and crew so thay will pay extra hours for them and will lead to extra failuer. However, we need to have a significante amount of evidence to evaluate the producer assumptions.
The first point is, the producer assume that the movie quality will be better if they will increase the fund and state a precise10 percent. Hence, depends on what he decieded this percent, and what is the effect of this percent on the overall movie production, how he is sure about the effectivieness of the 10 percent. We just do not know all these questions.
The second point is, the producer claims that the new director experience on field faraway from the movie production that will lead to retake all the scenes many times, but the vital point here, how the producer assume this point and sure about the new director is inconvenience to do such work. Indeed, it is possible that the new director has all the experience that will flourish the movie making process.
Moreover and the third point is, mention a correlation between hiring inexperienced persons with low cost and on the other hand that will pay more money to the actors and crew instead of the time spend waiting the new director arranging his jobs. Completely unplousible because we do not have any information about the director abilities, and there are multifarious factors can be affected the movie production. Such as, place of the movie, the story of the movie and myriad factors.
Clearly, then, we need to have additional valid points from the producer if he look forward to enhance the movie production. Not by assuming unreliable information that does not reflect the producer standpoints in the slight way.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: It might seem logical, at first glance, that the movie producer states to the head of the movie studio, that they have to increase the fund on the movie working by 10 percent in order to enhance the movies quality, and this request depends on the new director do not have the experience that will improve the movies production. and the main reasone for that his past experience was in the shampo advertisments and change his domine will lead to consume more time from actors and crew so thay will
Error: reasone Suggestion: reason
Error: domine Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: thay Suggestion: than
Error: advertisments Suggestion: advertisements
Error: shampo Suggestion: sharp
Sentence: pay extra hours for them and will lead to extra failuer.
Error: failuer Suggestion: failure
Sentence: However, we need to have a significante amount of evidence to evaluate the producer assumptions.
Error: significante Suggestion: significant
Sentence: Hence, depends on what he decieded this percent, and what is the effect of this percent on the overall movie production, how he is sure about the effectivieness of the 10 percent.
Error: decieded Suggestion: decided
Error: effectivieness Suggestion: effectiveness
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argument 1 -- we don't argue against 10%. instead we need to argue this:
'If we don’t get this extra money, the movie is virtually assured to be a failure.'
argument 2 -- better: movie and advertising are different industries.
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 370 350
No. of Characters: 1733 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.386 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.684 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.482 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.462 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.504 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.386 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.632 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.2 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 310, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'movies'' or 'movie's'?
Suggestion: movies'; movie's
...ve the experience that will improve the movies production. and the main reasone for th...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 329, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...hat will improve the movies production. and the main reasone for that his past expe...
^^^
Line 1, column 363, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experience'.
Suggestion: experience
...tion. and the main reasone for that his past experience was in the shampo advertisments and cha...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...l flourish the movie making process. Moreover and the third point is, mention a corre...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 187, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... money to the actors and crew instead of the time spend waiting the new director ...
^^
Line 9, column 80, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'looks'.
Suggestion: looks
...al valid points from the producer if he look forward to enhance the movie production...
^^^^
Line 9, column 93, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to enhancing'.
Suggestion: to enhancing
...ts from the producer if he look forward to enhance the movie production. Not by assuming u...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, look, moreover, second, so, then, third, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1781.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 370.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81351351351 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55082020353 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472972972973 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.0040151196 57.8364921388 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.0 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4615384615 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61538461538 5.70786347227 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313275799671 0.218282227539 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112422113278 0.0743258471296 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0883645660414 0.0701772020484 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174631902987 0.128457276422 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652695910755 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 26.0 12.3882235529 210% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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