A movie producer sent the following memo to the head of the movie studio.
“We need to increase the funding for the movie Working Title by 10% in order to ensure a quality product. As you know, we are working with a first-time director, whose only previous experience has been shooting commercials for a shampoo company. Since the advertising business is notoriously wasteful, it stands to reason that our director will expect to be able to shoot take after take, without concern for how much time is being spent on any one scene. In addition, while we have saved money by hiring relatively inexperienced assistant producers and directors, this savings in salary will undoubtedly translate to greater expenditures in paying the actors and unionized crew overtime for the extra hours they will spend on the set waiting for the assistant directors and producers to arrange things. If we don’t get this extra money, the movie is virtually assured to be a failure.”
The movie producer lucidly demands a 10% increase in the funding of a particular movie because the director and the crew for the movie are inexperienced and unfamiliar. The producer further bolsters his insinuation by emphasizing that the novice director would not be able manage time efficiently, consequently resulting into greater expenditures in paying the actors. Moreover, the producer believes that the movie will definitely result into a failure, if the demanded raise in the funding is not achieved. Clearly, there are many assumptions that the producer has taken into consideration without any basis.
Firstly, the producer assumes that an inexperienced person is inevitably incompetent. However, it is completely preposterous and ridiculous to make such an assumption. Although, the director does not have any experience in making movies, that does not implicate that he/she is not aware about the production of a movie. Every person is inexperienced when he/she begins some new process and so is the new director. It is indeed possible that he knows everything about directing a movie, but hasn't really been awarded a chance before.
Secondly, the producer generates a direct link between the advertising and movie business. He assumes that the director is going to make similar prodigal expenditures as in advertising. However, there is no basis to assume that. Movie making and advertise making are two completely disparate business, irrespective of having many similarities. Also, if the producer believes that the novice director would be notoriously prodigal in spending money, maybe a change in the director rather than a raise in the fund seems a more feasible solution of the problem.
Finally, it is also assumed that if the requisite amount of funding is not received, then the movie will result into a failure. Although, funding is an indispensable tool for a movie, there are many other factors upon which the success of a movie depends. For example, a heavy budgeted film like "Transcendence", might result into a failure due to poor story and incompatibility to satiate the audience. On the other hand, a short budgeted film like "The Gangs Of Wasseypur" may result into a blockbuster, because of excellent story and impeccable acting. Thus, to assume the success of a movie on the basis of funding is entirely unjustifiable.
Therefore, the demand of the producer to raise funding is based upon many faulty assumptions, eventually making his demand unjustifiable.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Also need to argue:
In addition, while we have saved money by hiring relatively inexperienced assistant producers and directors, this savings in salary will undoubtedly translate to greater expenditures in paying the actors and unionized crew overtime for the extra hours they will spend on the set waiting for the assistant directors and producers to arrange things.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 399 350
No. of Characters: 2039 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.469 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.11 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.941 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.95 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.932 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.539 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 491, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
...everything about directing a movie, but hasnt really been awarded a chance before. ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2127.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 396.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37121212121 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22461498031 2.78398813304 116% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502525252525 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3875283147 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.35 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05 5.70786347227 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230108453032 0.218282227539 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716714067593 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0751373608581 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12065351807 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755515864995 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 48.3550499002 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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