An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation
The author, through the claim, promotes the introduction of a newly developed millet supposedly concentrated with vitamin A. Also, it is assumed that the people of Tagus, an impoverished nation, whose population suffers from a deficiency of vitamin A, would readily adopt this newly developed breed of millet. The claim seems logical at an inchoate level, bolstered by the fact that the government is willing to provide subsidy to the farmers so as to grow the newly bred millet. However, the author has been inadvertently missing out some indispensable key points which he should consider before asserting the claim.
Firstly, it is assumed that the newly bred millet will be the source of vitamin A to the people of Tagus, which was supposedly absent prior to the discovery. On the other hand, this new breed of millet isn't the only product that could serve as a supplement for vitamin A. There are innumerable other grains and fruits that could be used to substitute the discovered breed of millet. The author simply assumes that there is no other source of vitamin A which is preposterous and even peevish.
Secondly, the author ignorantly assumes that the farmers will develop a penchant to grow the new breed simply because the government provides subsidy for the seeds. Seeds are not the only thing that characterizes the cost of growing a particular grain. There are other factors such as the type of land, the atmosphere, the weather and the amount of water and fertilizers the new plant would consume. Also, the farmers tend to be conventional and most likely would not like to risk themselves, just because the government is ready to provide a subsidy. The government needs to provide a better incentive or a better understanding of the benefits that could result due to the implementation of such a policy.
Finally, it is believed that since millet is a staple food in the indigenous regions, the native people would have a penchant for the new breed of millet. However, it is also plausible that the people would not adopt it at all, since the seed is from an international development organization which they might have never heard of.
From all the above arguments it can be concluded that the author needs more concrete incentives to make his claim plausible. He needs to provide evidence suggesting that the newly developed millet is the best among the various other vitamin A options. Also, there has to be a sufficient dissemination of information among the farmers to indicate the benefits of the new millet in their diet.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not exactly
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Let's analyze the structure of the statement and argue accordingly:
condition 1:
While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. //your argument 2
condition 2:
Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. //maybe people don't like the taste.
conclusion:
To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet. //Need to argue against the conclusion always. maybe part of your argument 1
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 431 350
No. of Characters: 2073 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.556 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.81 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.718 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.938 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.941 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.596 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 444, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...lling to provide subsidy to the farmers so as to grow the newly bred millet. However, th...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 203, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...he other hand, this new breed of millet isnt the only product that could serve as a ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 242, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A option' or simply 'options'?
Suggestion: A option; Options
...he best among the various other vitamin A options. Also, there has to be a sufficient dis...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, as to, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2128.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 430.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9488372093 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76029955813 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46511627907 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.3812898912 57.8364921388 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 118.222222222 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8888888889 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27777777778 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.40639118636 0.218282227539 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124206382951 0.0743258471296 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0858294512423 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218157087855 0.128457276422 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474266767865 0.0628817314937 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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