"Over 80 percent of the respondents to a recent survey indicated a desire to reduce their intake of foods containing fats and cholesterol, and today low-fat products abound in many food stores. Since many of the food products currently marketed by Old Dairy Industries are high in fat and cholesterol, the company's sales are likely to diminish greatly and company profits will no doubt decrease. We therefore advise Old Dairy stockholders to sell their shares, and other investors not to purchase stock in this company."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.
The newsletter claims that Old Dairy Industries are not a good investment and it corroborates that Old Dairy Industry food product is high in fat and cholesterol, also 80 percent of respondents desire to reduce intake of a foods containing fat and cholesterol. However, there are unsubstantiated evidences that don’t match with the argument; in fact, it will influence the argument illogical to fathom. Thus, there are three question to be answered for understanding of the argument.
First of all, the question needed to be answered is how newsletter make a judgment about over 80percent of respondents desire to reduce the food intake containing high in fat and cholesterol. In other words, newsletter would probably sum up only overall subscribers and maybe over 80percent of subscribers doesn’t want to eat food containing high cholesterol and fat. There should be a specific evidence that which region and which city statistics hate to eat food that contains high fat and cholesterol.
Moreover, the question should be answered is what kind of food that Old Dairy Industries manufacture. The argument explains that Old Dairy Industries are the one that many of foods have high fat and cholesterol. However, it doesn’t mean that Old Dairy Industries are not manufacturing the low-fat and cholesterol food. Hence, there should be explanation or data about the food lists from Old Dairy Industries.
Last but least, the question should be answered is that how Old Dairy Industries come up with solution. The argument explained that there is no vision on the Old Dairy Industries. However, there is no specific evidence that Old Diary don’t have any solution for this problematic issue about food containing high-fat and cholesterol. Therefore, newsletter should make an evidence about the vision of the Old Dairy Industries so that stockholders and the investors would understand.
In conclusion, the author concludes that Old Dairy Industries are not a good investment with unproven evidences. However, if author adduces the argument with those three questions asked above, then the argument will be more cogent to understand.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 222, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a food' or simply 'foods'?
Suggestion: a food; foods
... respondents desire to reduce intake of a foods containing fat and cholesterol. However...
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Line 5, column 348, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean ''?
...holesterol food. Hence, there should be explanation or data about the food lists from Old D...
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Line 9, column 247, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ment will be more cogent to understand.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1825.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 339.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38348082596 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02935347043 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.427728613569 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 553.5 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.165294053 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0625 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1875 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8125 5.70786347227 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296823416767 0.218282227539 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119057444256 0.0743258471296 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113503520488 0.0701772020484 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185870648501 0.128457276422 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105694470906 0.0628817314937 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.