Some people believe that in order to thrive, a society must put its own overall success before the well-being of its individual citizens. Others believe that the well-being of a society can only be measured by the general welfare of all its people.
The statement claims that well-being or culmination of the society is dependent on either society success itself or the general welfare of all its people. The society makes a deal how to be succeeded and most people are trying to step forward to handle the culmination. Government will make policy to make burnish the society to be more valuable. Some company are trying to make a project to profess the idea that will make a profit. All types of the culmination will make society better; when measuring culmination, success of overall society can be measured. However, there are two attractive reasons that will affect the statement disagree: individual being is very important vision to make society better.
First of all, individual itself is more important than the overall society because they are the ‘one big group’ that will make a vision to society better. Take for instance, global senility of population of any nation has been very problematic issue that affect the problem. However, the government tried to make policy of delaying resign of age. This idea makes more idea that the economy circles more than not having this issue.
Admittedly, when it comes to measure efflorescence, a society can put its own overall success. Overall national economy concludes the part that people are trying to make better decision will be the overall success of society. For example, United States of America has better GDP than China’s GDP, probably USA made better decision before china developed. However, there is simple idea that if people are not trying the achieve goal of company, government or individual itself, then it will disturb the overall society. Thus all individual is more important than the overall society.
In conclusion, the general vision of the statement is about culmination. It is controversial debate because overall society itself can be measured by means of culmination. However, with those explanation above, it will buttress the idea that individual itself will make better measurement of efflorescence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...mple idea that if people are not trying the achieve goal of company, government or individu...
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Line 5, column 525, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...en it will disturb the overall society. Thus all individual is more important than t...
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Line 7, column 187, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this explanation' or 'those explanations'?
Suggestion: this explanation; those explanations
... by means of culmination. However, with those explanation above, it will buttress the idea that i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, then, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 58.6224719101 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 328.0 442.535393258 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28658536585 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74386856348 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 215.323595506 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463414634146 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 567.0 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.740449438202 270% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.3779760537 60.3974514979 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.3333333333 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2222222222 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61111111111 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297355620562 0.243740707755 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115540465659 0.0831039109588 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115339554624 0.0758088955206 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188851024112 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0984140712527 0.0667264976115 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 100.480337079 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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