Over the past ten years, there has been a 20 percent decline in the size of the average audience at classical sakespeare theatre productions. In spite of increased advertising we are attracting fewer people to our shows, causing profits to decreasre. the best way is doing 'sakespeare in the park program'. two years ago nearby avon company started free play in park and its prfit have increased 10 percent since then.If we start we can predit profit will increase too.
Seeing the entire situation, it is clearly known that the problem is a serious one which should be resolved by corrective measures. The decline in profit of classical sakespeare productions for the past 10 years is the major thing to be considered. But, there is no reason mentioned by the author for the loss in profit.
Firstly, a detailed report is needed in changes occurred over past ten years. The report should contain a detailed analysis of How many regular audiences were there? What type of plays they prefer? The author’s argument lacks in providing evidence and reason for the shakespeare’s loss in profit and number of his audiences. First of all, without knowing a valid reason of Why the production house of sakespeare face decrease? It is not possible to give a perfect remedy to overcome this decrease.
Eventhough the Free play in park by Avon Repertory company seems to make profit by increase of 10%, It may not be a right alternative to be suggested for sakespeare company. Since, Shakespeare has decrease in audience for over 10 years, There must be many other reasons he could fail in his play. So, only by changing the place from theater to park won’t help Shakespeare to gain more profit. He definetly needs a change and there is no doubt on it. But, The author’s suggestion by considering the 10% increase of profit in Avon Repertory company is not sufficient to take it in account. It would be strongly accepted as one of the better solution if he would have added the details about what other special ideas are included in the park play. So that it would be easy to recognized what attracts people in a play.
Moreover, Copying others ideas and plans as it is cannot be encouraged. Because people may lose interest in seeing the similar things. Therefore, The authors choice and evidence provided is plausible and it may not be the best move to make profit.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 330 350
No. of Characters: 1524 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.262 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.618 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.556 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.368 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.2 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.275 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.475 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.079 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 665, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had added'?
Suggestion: had added
...ted as one of the better solution if he would have added the details about what other special id...
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Line 5, column 756, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...al ideas are included in the park play. So that it would be easy to recognized what att...
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Line 7, column 73, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nd plans as it is cannot be encouraged. Because people may lose interest in seeing the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, no doubt, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 329.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82066869301 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75641159813 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553191489362 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7627717269 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4736842105 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3157894737 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05263157895 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125468549436 0.218282227539 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0401136541852 0.0743258471296 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436413485636 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0770502811025 0.128457276422 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0248035609622 0.0628817314937 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.3799401198 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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