Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increasingly more time to covering national news and less time to covering weather and local news. During the same time period, most of the complaints we received from viewers were concerned with the station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, several local businesses that used to run advertisements during our late-night news program have just cancelled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand the coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs
The author of this proposal tries to make people understand his views on the changed strategy adopted by them over a year which focused more on broadcasting of national news rather than broadcasting the local and weather news. As it seems to have backfired the strategy adopted by the station they wish to change the strategy and try and bring back devoted time to local news.
The reasoning of author seems to be quite provident but is wanting of consideration of certain aspects. The author seems to miss the point in only analyzing what is shown rather than the quality of content shown. While the subject of broadcast seems to be the pivotal reason for the failure on previous strategy the possibility of an unanalyzed source is equally likely.
The dynamics of a news station are mainly based on in its content, quality of content and ad placements. While one major aspect is scrutinized many other aspects still need some analysis.
Moreover, many complaints are received by the station regarding local news and weather news it doesn't statistically support the claim of the author in being the sole reason for decline in number of viewers. For example there may be some unaltered content shown which is not preferable for children.
The evidence provided in form of complaints while strengthens the argument but doesn't ensure that the result will be favorable for the station. Thus it seems to be the assumption of the author that the subject or the content shown is the reason behind decrease of the viewers.
Hence, only changing the strategy regrading the subject of content shown seems to be lacking some hindsight and synthesis of other side of the coin.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 285 350
No. of Characters: 1363 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.109 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.782 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.533 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 98 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.247 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.383 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.383 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.068 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 331, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...on they wish to change the strategy and try and bring back devoted time to local news. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 57, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... author seems to be quite provident but is wanting of consideration of certain aspects. Th...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 105, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
..., quality of content and ad placements. While one major aspect is scrutinized many ot...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 188, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...other aspects still need some analysis. Moreover, many complaints are received b...
^^^
Line 4, column 96, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...egarding local news and weather news it doesnt statistically support the claim of the ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 80, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ints while strengthens the argument but doesnt ensure that the result will be favorabl...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 145, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...sult will be favorable for the station. Thus it seems to be the assumption of the au...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, may, moreover, regarding, so, still, then, thus, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1388.0 2260.96107784 61% => OK
No of words: 283.0 441.139720559 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90459363958 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56792015783 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508833922261 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 705.55239521 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4587217843 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.666666667 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5833333333 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58333333333 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136689347077 0.218282227539 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0504516524178 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0735724043404 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0681399384209 0.128457276422 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826076811227 0.0628817314937 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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