Paleo diets, in which one eats how early hominids (human ancestors) did, are becoming increasingly popular. Proponents claim our bodies evolved to eat these types of food, especially bone broth, a soup made by cooking animal bones for several hours. They believe it has many health-promoting nutrients, such as cartilage, which can heal our joints, and chondroitin, which promotes nerve regeneration. Skeptics point out that ingested cartilage can’t replenish cartilage in your knees or elbows and ingested chondroitin doesn’t make our brains any healthier. Yet, there is strong anecdotal evidence that people who consume bone broth have fewer metabolic and inflammatory diseases than those who don’t. Therefore, ancient humans knew something about our physiology that we don’t, and that by emulating the way they ate, we can cure many chronic illnesses.
In the passage, author claims that ancient humans knew something about our physiology that we do not know and by emulating the way they ate, we can cure many chronic illnesses. This claim is based on some assumptions which are not supported by proper evidence and thus unpersuasive and have several flaws.
First of all, author cities bone broth soup made by cooking animal bones for several hours. Which contains cartilage and chondroitin, and have several good side effect on body. Cartilage heals our joints and chondroitin promotes nerve regeneration. But author does not give any evidence about it. So, the claims is not convincing.
In addition, the author says that skeptic points out that cartilage and chondroitin have no good health benefits to buttress his argument about implemantation of eating habit of ancient people. Author only mentions it but does not give any medical report based on which he can conclude it. Without these types of document, author claims will be unwarranted when it stands.
Finally, talking about anecdotal evidence author tries to bolster his argument that ancient people know something special that we don't know. Author says that people who consume bone broth have fewer metabolic and inflammatory diseases than those who don't. But he does not give any evidence about this anecdotal evidence.
All in all, the claim of emulating the way of eating of ancient people can cure many chronic illnesses is based on a series of assuption which are unsubstantiated. To bolster his argument author can provide some evidence or medical report of a fossil of ancient people. Yet, before emulating the eating habit further investigation and evidence are necessary.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 277 350
No. of Characters: 1389 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.08 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.014 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.591 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 72 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.148 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.533 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.364 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.595 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 131, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...t people know something special that we dont know. Author says that people who consu...
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Line 13, column 251, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...nd inflammatory diseases than those who dont. But he does not give any evidence abou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, so, thus, in addition, talking about, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.6327345309 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1439.0 2260.96107784 64% => OK
No of words: 275.0 441.139720559 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23272727273 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63278754326 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.9614532858 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9375 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1875 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4375 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163215747226 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589398099162 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0761461613983 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0989053187879 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637297399473 0.0628817314937 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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