Paleo diets, in which one eats how early hominids (human ancestors) did, are becoming increasingly popular. Proponents claim our bodies evolved to eat these types of food, especially bone broth, a soup made by cooking animal bones for several hours. They believe it has many health-promoting nutrients, such as cartilage, which can heal our joints, and chondroitin, which promotes nerve regeneration. Skeptics point out that ingested cartilage can’t replenish cartilage in your knees or elbows and ingested chondroitin doesn’t make our brains any healthier. Yet, there is strong anecdotal evidence that people who consume bone broth have fewer metabolic and inflammatory diseases than those who don’t. Therefore, ancient humans knew something about our physiology that we don’t, and that by emulating the way they ate, we can cure many chronic illnesses.
The author of the passage suggests that by emulating the way early hominids ate, we can cure many chronic illness. The author argues that these types of food have many health promoting nutrients. I believe that the passage has two fallacies, which i will explain in the following essay.
First fallacy, the author doesn't provide information on the differences in living conditions, weather and various other factors that affected ancient and current humans to adopt different food habits. For instance, people in the colder regions tend to eat food which warms their body while people from moderately hot regions tend to eat food which cools their body. If the author had provided such details in showing how Paleo diets are useful to specific regions of the world, then the passage would have had a stronger stance.
Second fallacy, the author himself has no ironclad evidence or referential data to prove that Paleo diets indeed has many health-promoting nutrients to cure chronic illness. The author first talks about how proponents the claim the diet has nutritional value, then he talks about how the skeptics think it is otherwise and finally argues based on anecdotal evidence that the diet has nutritional value. This shows that author is ambivalent and not definitively sure about the facts. If the author had provided better evidence that referenced trusted sources, then his arguments would be strong.
In conclusion, by examining the various factors involved in showing that emulating the Paleo diet would cure many chronic illness, the argument does not address the above fallacies. While the proposal does highlight a possibility, more information is required to warrant any action.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 274 350
No. of Characters: 1397 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.069 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.099 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.501 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.84 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.372 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.605 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 164, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun health seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much health', 'a good deal of health'.
Suggestion: much health; a good deal of health
...or argues that these types of food have many health promoting nutrients. I believe that the...
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Line 1, column 249, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...at the passage has two fallacies, which i will explain in the following essay. ...
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Line 5, column 27, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...g essay. First fallacy, the author doesnt provide information on the differences ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, second, so, then, while, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.6327345309 25% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 55.5748502994 45% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1439.0 2260.96107784 64% => OK
No of words: 273.0 441.139720559 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27106227106 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56955464315 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564102564103 0.468620217663 120% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 705.55239521 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.400814961 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.916666667 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118464446344 0.218282227539 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0394597718728 0.0743258471296 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413350534946 0.0701772020484 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0680200658559 0.128457276422 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448325224374 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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