Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
While there are some parents who believe in forbidding young children owning smart phones, there are others who believe it is an important tool to keep in touch. Personally, I believe that parents should forbid young children from owning a smart phone. I feel this way for three reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First reason, there are other ways to keep in touch with young children which requires less maintainance. For instance the use of smart watches with cellular network would be ideal for children as it would not only help in keeping track of the child but also the child's health. Moreover these smart watches can also help in making or recieving calls thus fulfiing the parent's desire to keep in touch.
Second reason, we cannot assume that every child would be careful and responsible with a smart phone as it is an age of being naughty, free spirited and aloof of any responsibility. For example we cannot expect a 6 year old to be responsible about a phone while she herself needs careful attention. On top of it the cost associated to phone if it is lost or damaged by the child would be expensive.
Third reason, the children wouldn't be able to identify malicious calls or messages which could further be dangerous for them as hackers and child predators would be able to keep track of them. This again leads to various unnecessary problems that parents wouldn't want to burden the child and themselves with.
In conclusion I am of the opinion that it is prudent of parent's to forbid young children from owning smart phones. This is because there are others ways to keep in touch of children, children wouldn't be responsible with expensive smart phones and they wouldn't have the knowledge of hackers or other malicious activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, third, thus, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1481.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 306.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83986928105 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49547627799 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1564985861 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.923076923 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5384615385 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36902418002 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154038082206 0.076458572812 201% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112698296569 0.0737576698707 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229138881837 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136224346833 0.0645574589148 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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