"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night.”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted
In this study, the author consents to the suggestion that, in order to succeed in a business, one must hire the people who sleep less than 6 hours per night. In my view, this argument does not hold true, and it’s rife with holes. Furthermore, we need to look into the evidence to the assumptions and to check if the assumptions proved unwarranted or not.
Citing a survey of the 300 Mention advertising executives. The author implies there is a causal relationship between the hours of sleep and the amount of the profit increase, and the former lead to the latter. The assumption would be invalidated if the profit made by the executive is counted by the number of the projects he or she may be managed. If one maintains the more advertisement program, he may be responsible for more revenue generation, and hence decreased the hours of sleep. Then the author may be confused with a reversed casual relationship. Thus, the assumption is unwarranted because the profit increasing may be attributed to the number of projects he holds. Otherwise, To strengthen his/her argument, the author approved the increase of sleep time may cause the revenue and profit to go down, and there are no other reasons contributed to the profit growth, then the assumption can state true. Furthermore, if it is built on the implication that the rapid growth of the business, projects expansion and profit improvement is attributed to the less sleep of time. We may find the Consider, the more overtime of the subordinates and the improvement in teamwork. Then, the sleep of time less than 6 hours for the executive is unlikely to be accounted for the profit growth, and then such an assumption is weakened, the conclusion of the recommendation is then open to doubt.
In addition, we would also notice that the author make a negative linkage between the time counted of sleep and the working time, and the increase of the working time has a positive effect on the revenue and company growth. By exam the hypothesis, unless we can prove that these higher level management people with sleep hours no more than 6 hours are fully immersed within the work, also, they were neither actually devoted too much to the social events nor family companion reason, and hence decreased the sleep hours, a concrete connection between the mutually effective may not be effectively made. Therefore, to strengthen his or her argument, the author would benefit from taking a further survey for the full daytime schedule to better evaluate the actual working time. We can validate the assumption made by the author, otherwise, it would also undermine the suggestion.
What is more, the assumption that the survey results can be applied more broadly may not hold true. The subjects of the survey are all from a single industry, namely, advertising. Maybe it is needful for people in this field to be a night owl. However, this rule may not apply to other industries, for example, insurance or manufacturing. In addition, the survey only asks the executives who may have to work extra hours to lead the companies. But for employees at lower level sleeping less may not be very helpful for achieving success.
In sum, we should further look at the unstated assumption to check the statement for the suggestion is reasonable or not.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK, but somehow duplicated to the argument 1. also need to argue the sample size, and survey date which is 'recently'.
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 562 350
No. of Characters: 2661 1500
No. of Different Words: 240 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.869 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.735 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.662 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 183 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.417 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.797 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.792 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.301 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.495 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 915, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...th, then the assumption can state true. Furthermore, if it is built on the impli...
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Line 3, column 1098, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... to the less sleep of time. We may find the Consider, the more overtime of the subordinates ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, in my view, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2752.0 2260.96107784 122% => OK
No of words: 561.0 441.139720559 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9055258467 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86676880123 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76500065661 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 204.123752495 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454545454545 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 854.1 705.55239521 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.67365269461 478% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.81422521 57.8364921388 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.666666667 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.375 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91666666667 5.70786347227 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151797314561 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459382290528 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419798321794 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0766335067248 0.128457276422 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435597044424 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 98.500998004 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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