A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising

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A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night." Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The author of this article proposed to hire only people who need less than 6 hours sleep per night, to boost growth of the business but to move forward on the proposal would need more information and thought. The argument seems right at first sight, however on deeper analysis it becomes clear that certain aspects are not taken into consideration which leads to unanswered questions and logical flaws.

Firstly, the survey had been considered only 300 male and female executives as sample space, where sample space is very less to conclude on something. Survey shows that there is an association between the sleep and growth rate of person, author has assumed from the survey that less number of sleep of employee causes to success to the firm. Success of firm is dependent on many factors not only on the sleep time of employees. Reason for the success can be, there is no competitor in that firm or firm has succeeded due to season, like in that season firm has good margin of profit or might be due to good management.

Moreover, author might have elicited that employees spend less time for sleeping and work more time, however there might be different reasons for the less time of employee, might be employee has personal reason of or diseases or employee is doing part time job in the night. Survey is conducted only on advertising firms so authors conclusion of hiring people with less sleep time will not work with other kinds of businesses than advertising firm.

In sum up, there are many other factors which needs to be considered for higher growth, author has concluded that hiring of people with less time will lead to higher growth which is based on flaws and evidenceless statements.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 28.8173652695 31% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1429.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 294.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86054421769 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39633514745 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534013605442 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 705.55239521 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 22.8473053892 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.3215001506 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 178.625 119.503703932 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.75 23.324526521 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176105134122 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831365381925 0.0743258471296 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.071956031966 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0940846921222 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0617109531836 0.0628817314937 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 14.3799401198 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.86 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 98.500998004 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 11.1389221557 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 294 350
No. of Characters: 1382 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.141 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.701 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.34 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 90 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 58 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 39 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.563 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.417 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.677 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5