"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the adver

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"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night. "

Write a response in which you examine the stated and / or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The argument seems plausible ant first but it actually is specious on meticulous analysis. Conclusion made is based on unwarranted assumptions which ultimately have weakened the argument. To strengthen the argument, three question based on the assumptions must be answered.

Firstly, how the conclusion is made based upon the only one study? What if the study was done by the survey and questionnaire of the survey had options related to sleeping hour only? The argument based on a single study might fail if another study resulted opposite the the study based on which conclusion is made. Hence, this assumption weakens the argument.

Secondly, was the sample advertising firm studied represented whole advertising firm? What if the executives sleeping more than 6 hours but had very high profit were not included in the study? Without knowing the number of advertising firms studied, making any conclusion ultimately weaken the argument .

Finally, how would the hiring committee know about how many hours the people to be hired sleep? Nobody will say that I am lazy and I sleep more than 6 hours a day in a job interview. So, is this the effective measure to know how faster growth of the company is achieved? There might be other measures to prosper the business instead of sleeping hour which would strengthen he argument.

In conclusion, the argument is based on many unwarranted assumptions and unsubstantiated conclusion. So, conclusion should be made after the rigorous study of causes of faster growth of the advertising firm not based on the single study. Also, answering above questions would strengthen the argument .

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 28.8173652695 24% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 55.5748502994 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1373.0 2260.96107784 61% => OK
No of words: 264.0 441.139720559 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20075757576 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83995871121 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537878787879 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 705.55239521 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.9776482334 57.8364921388 40% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.7647058824 119.503703932 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5294117647 23.324526521 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76470588235 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129114726807 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445833454354 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465879095637 0.0701772020484 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0764585846059 0.128457276422 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.057501490195 0.0628817314937 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.3799401198 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 98.500998004 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 264 350
No. of Characters: 1334 1500
No. of Different Words: 134 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.031 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.053 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.768 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 91 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.529 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.9 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.592 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.082 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5