A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
This argument is the outcome of the investigation of Mentia residents that suffered headaches, the consequence of using salicylates, how salicylates are used to add as food preservatives and favour to food. There is a report that due to an increase in salicylates there is a decrease in the average number of headaches. In the end, the health experts predict that due to the effect of salicylates there will be a decline in the number of headaches in future.
It stated that salicylates are chemicals helpful for treating headaches. But apart from treating headache, it may have some other side effect in other parts of our body. The side effects are not mentioned in the argument. It also states that salicylates are used in food processing industries as preservatives for food processing companies. Are the preservatives good for health, are they save to use and for how long we can use this? this type of questions is not answered in the given argument that would strengthen the arguments.
The author mentions that there is a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a decline in the average number of headaches. But to prove his argument there are no statistics presented. There is no report to prove the author's argument is true. Another use of salicylates is that it adds flavour additives for foods. Is this artificial flavour good for health, what is the composition of the artificial flavour in the food? All these answers should be mentioned in order to make the prediction reasonable.
The food companies are planning to add salicylates in their food production. Due to which health experts assume that there will be decline headache cases in future. In which food product these salicylates are going to be used, are those product used bt Mentia residents. All these answers should be given in order to justify the assumptions.
Lastly, I would conclude that the effect of salicylates in the human body, its safe limit to intake should be stated. Regarding the food industries, it should provide more details about the product and provide statistical information to prove the argument more effective. To support the argument author should provide more information like reports regarding the composition of salicylates in food products. The amount and consumptions of salicylates should be provided.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1918 1500
No. of Different Words: 158 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.969 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.858 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.545 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.152 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.273 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.32 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.375 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.098 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 449, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...be a decline in the number of headaches in future. It stated that salicylates are chemic...
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Line 2, column 435, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...o use and for how long we can use this? this type of questions is not answered in th...
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Line 3, column 245, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...sented. There is no report to prove the authors argument is true. Another use of salicy...
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Line 4, column 154, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...at there will be decline headache cases in future. In which food product these salicylate...
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Line 4, column 231, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this product' or 'those products'?
Suggestion: this product; those products
...e salicylates are going to be used, are those product used bt Mentia residents. All these ans...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, lastly, may, regarding, so, then, apart from
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1962.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 386.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0829015544 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93494389641 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.422279792746 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 635.4 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7456901785 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3043478261 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7826086957 23.324526521 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5652173913 5.70786347227 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190080360781 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061650564962 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537365081835 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120355724024 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0583867136307 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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