A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
Based on the results of a twenty-year study and the plan of food-processing companies to use salicylates as food additives, some health experts predicts that residents of Mentia will suffer ever fewer headache in the future. However, by trying to answer some necessary questions, the prediction and the argument on which it is based are not convincing.
The recent issued twenty-year study claimed the correlation between the effect that the commercial use of salicylates has on reducing headaches, and it is used to make the prediction of fewer headaches in the future. The question needs to be answered is whether the commercial use of salicylates is the reason for the steady decline in the number of headaches. There are many variables that could cause the number of headaches to decrease, such as using more aspirin, enough sleep, and regular exercise. So, consuming salicylates is not necessarily lead to the result. Therefore, the result of the twenty-year study is not solid for supporting the prediction.
In addition, though salicylates can be used as flavor additives, and many food-processing companies plan to use it, the question is whether it is actually going to happen. If not, the prediction based on this argument is losing ground. With the question, whether a medical element is allowed to use for a certain purpose is not only up to the companies but also restricted by policies from the government. Moreover, it is dangerous to assume that the more a person takes in salicylates, the better his headache is getting. Excessive doses may be toxic to a person. Hence, it may not actually happen for food-accompanies to use salicylates as flavor additives. Consequently, the prediction is credible.
In conclusion, after scrutinizing the argument on which the prediction is based on by answering two necessary questions, we can see the argument is not cogent. As a result, the prediction is not plausible.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- correct after 'Moreover'. In GRE/GMAT, we have to accept all data or evidence are true from the topic.
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Let's analyze the structure of the statement and argue accordingly:
condition 1:
The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. //your argument 1
condition 2:
At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. //it is not: the more, the better, maybe the more, the worse
conclusion:
Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future. //suppose it can cure headache, but it doesn't mean it will prevent headaches happening
flaws:
No. of Words: 314 //More content wanted. For issue essays, around 450 words, for argument essays, around 400 words.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 314 350
No. of Characters: 1570 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.21 4.7
Average Word Length: 5 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.022 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.617 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.812 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.475 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'consequently', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.216524216524 0.25644967241 84% => OK
Verbs: 0.182336182336 0.15541462614 117% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0854700854701 0.0836205057962 102% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0541310541311 0.0520304965353 104% => OK
Pronouns: 0.022792022792 0.0272364105082 84% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128205128205 0.125424944231 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0626780626781 0.0416121511921 151% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.13529330366 2.79052419416 112% => OK
Infinitives: 0.037037037037 0.026700313972 139% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.119658119658 0.113004496875 106% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.017094017094 0.0255425247493 67% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00854700854701 0.0127820249294 67% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1932.0 2731.13054187 71% => OK
No of words: 314.0 446.07635468 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.15286624204 6.12365571057 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.57801047555 92% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.388535031847 0.378187486979 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.312101910828 0.287650121315 109% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.242038216561 0.208842608468 116% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.187898089172 0.135150697306 139% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13529330366 2.79052419416 112% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 207.018472906 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484076433121 0.469332199767 103% => OK
Word variations: 48.3793869995 52.1807786196 93% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.039408867 80% => OK
Sentence length: 19.625 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6904454828 57.7814097925 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.75 141.986410481 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.9375 0.724660767414 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.58251231527 0% => OK
Readability: 50.8351910828 51.9672348444 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.57142857143 1.8405768891 85% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.436252299278 0.441005458295 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.139898553279 0.135418324435 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.101038155369 0.0829849096947 122% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.604609031114 0.58762219726 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.190259598931 0.147661913831 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.196276731814 0.193483328276 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122377301503 0.0970749176394 126% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.490501711324 0.42659136922 115% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0589267361746 0.0774707102158 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.316186394625 0.312017818177 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13922083946 0.0698173142475 199% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.33743842365 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 2.0 6.46551724138 31% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.82389162562 177% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 14.657635468 89% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.