A recently issued twenty year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin a medicine used to treat headaches Al | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.

The author suggests that the use of salicylates will help the residents of Mentia to suffer fewer headaches in the future. For basing the above statement the author reasons that, a twenty-year study has been conducted that concludes that the use of salicylates is safe. Moreover, salicylates could also be used as food preservatives and food flavoring. However, while the conclusion drawn by the author might hold water, it rests on several unfounded assumption that, if not substantiated, might dramatically attenuates the persuasiveness of the argument. Therefore, several questions must be answered to validate the arguments present in the prompt.

Firstly, does the study presents how many people were involded in the tests? Additionally, do the author represent any particular age group who were participated in the study? If might be possible that the study that has been conducted to test the viablity and validity of Salicylates usage was conducted on a small number of people who were residents of Mantia or the people involded in the study were of a particular age group, say 20-30 years old. If this is the case then, it's irrelevant for the author to draw a common results for every individual. If the author would have contributed with a few more details then it would be a plausible explanation for bolstering the use of salicylates.

Secondly, does the author took acount of other side effects caused by the use of salicylates? There is nowhere mentiond in the argument about the side effects caused by the use of salicylates. It could be possible that even though the people are using salicylates in their diets or as a medicinal purpose, it is engendering other problems and difficulties in the body. People might be facing other challenges with their bodies like fatigue, dizziness, letharginess, etc. Therefore, without any particular peices of evidence the author's reasoning is flaunt and ersatz.

Last but not the least, it's elicited that the food processing companies has discovered that salicylates can be used as a flavouring agent for foods. However, there is a flaw in the statement as the author fails to provide any details about the food testing company. As there is no evidece about the credulity and authenticity of the food testing company, to believe in their results seem doubtful. If the author could have provided a few positive facts about the food testing company then, it would be plausible to believe in the results provided by them.

A careful analysis exposes the loopholes present in the argument. The author's conclusion that the Mentia residents will suffer less headaches in the future seems dubious and skeptical because the reasons provided by the authore to buttress the conclusion is appocryphal. Therefore, the author must rethink and should provide the readers with a logical and foolproof solution.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 25, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'present'?
Suggestion: present
... the prompt. Firstly, does the study presents how many people were involded in the te...
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Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...y of Salicylates usage was conducted on a small number of people who were residents of Mantia or ...
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Line 3, column 555, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... a common results for every individual. If the author would have contributed with ...
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Line 3, column 569, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had contributed'?
Suggestion: had contributed
...lts for every individual. If the author would have contributed with a few more details then it would b...
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Line 3, column 616, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...ave contributed with a few more details then it would be a plausible explanation for...
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Line 9, column 72, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...loopholes present in the argument. The authors conclusion that the Mentia residents wi...
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Line 9, column 129, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun headaches is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...n that the Mentia residents will suffer less headaches in the future seems dubious a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2397.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 465.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15483870968 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87415472903 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462365591398 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 764.1 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9188060645 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.954545455 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1363636364 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172563617277 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554458285567 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708755888567 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101578064519 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561963782075 0.0628817314937 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments