A recently issued twenty year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin a medicine used to treat headaches Al

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A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.

According to the author, some twenty-year study tells us about an observation that consumption of Salicylates by residents of Mentia may help in reducing headaches reported. Further, the stanza informs us that some of the food-processing companies are looking forward to use Salicylates as a food preservative. The author without giving a strong proof for his statements tells us about prediction of health experts that residents of Mentia will suffer fewer headaches in the future. Though the logical flow seems to be acceptable, but a keen look gives rise to multiple questions in one's mind.
Firstly, in a statement the author states about a correlation between rising in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches. Without providing us with some precise scientific and experimental proof, the author is not at a position to make such rigid statements. One can ask whether only consumption of salicylates is responsible for reduction of headaches cases? There may be alternative responses such as healthy lifestyle of residents, awareness campaign by doctors for health, reduction of unhealthy food stalls in Mentia and others. Also, the average reduction may not signify any specific statistical information and remains quit doubtful. Thus, without any specific evidence the statement made by the author is not acceptable.
Further, some food-processing companies are making plans to use additives for food products based on the positive effects mentioned in the study report. Though this seems to be good decision to make plans based on some study, but once need to evaluate the reliability of reports. It is the fact that if a product has some positive effects, it may also have some negative effects on body as well. Some of them are as follows - reduction on thinking capabilities, may act as sedatives, may give rise to slowly rising diseases and others. So, the advice is to look at all possible effects and then decide whether to make use of salicylates or not.
Moreover, while making a conclusion for the paragraph the author tells about some vague prediction made by health experts that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headache in the future. Though this can be true, but without any specific evidence this statement is not acceptable. There may be the case that the norishment of heath of residents is due to health habits and not the consumption of salicylates-rich food products. Also, the possibilities of slowly occuring negative effect of salicylates cannot be denied. Thus, need some scientific proof to strenthen the prediction.
Finally, the only advice the author must follow is to collect some precise proof for the statements made and based on that conclude whether it is useful to use salicylates as food preservative or not to reduce the headaches of residents of Mentia.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, thus, well, while, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2397.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 464.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16594827586 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95892722417 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448275862069 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 772.2 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0622042331 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.142857143 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0952380952 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61904761905 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190832984172 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646276187495 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668462399743 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133197163814 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473248547614 0.0628817314937 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 464 350
No. of Characters: 2348 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.641 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.06 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.89 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 182 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.095 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.257 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.762 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.327 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5