Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author assumes that due to destroyed food, the Fly-Away pest Control Company’s service is terrible. Then, changing the service company from the Fly-Away pest Control Company to Buzzoff Pest Control Company is best choice to save money. However, since there are lacking many pieces of evidence, the author’s recommendation is unreasonable.
To begin with, the author has to provide more pieces of evidence to support the relationship between bad pest control service of the Fly-Away Pest Control Company and destroyed food. It’s is possible that other factors contributed destroyed food. For instance, destroyed food might have resulted from natural disaster; Since Palm City has irregular pest disaster per ten years, the destroyed food in Palm City last month is just an accident. Lacking evidence that links bad pest control service of the Fly-Away Pest Control Company and destroyed food, it is presumptuous to suggest that bad pest control service was responsible for destroyed food.
Further, the author needs to provide evidence to prove the analogy between warehouse in Wintervale and warehouse in Palm City. However, it is entirely possible that the condition of warehouse in Wintervale and warehouse in Palm City is totally different. First of all, since Wintervale has more stable environmental condition, Wintervale has less pest than Palm City. Then, Wintervale can use less pest control service than Palm City to reach a better affection. In short, without accounting for such possible differences between Palm City and Wintervale, the arguer cannot prove that the pest control service of the Buzzoff Pest Control Company is better than the pest control service of the Fly-Away Pest Control Company.
Even if the condition of Palm City and Wintervale is the same, further evidence is needed to prove that the best means of saving money is to return to the pest control service of Buzzoff. Saving money is a factor relating to not only service feed but also performance. It is entirely possible that Buzzoff Pest Control Company’s service fee is higher than Fly-Away Pest Control Company’s service fee, and the performance of Buzzoff is lower than Fly-Away; Thus, choosing Buzzoff Pest Control Company is not a good choice for saving money.
To sum up, due to lacking many pieces of evidence, the author’s recommendation is unwarranted. If author can offer the evidence that destroyed food does not resulted from other factors, Palm City’s condition is equal to Wintervale’s condition, and proving choosing Buzzoff company is the best method to save money, the recommendation will be more reasonable.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 211, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
...Company to Buzzoff Pest Control Company is best choice to save money. However, since th...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 184, Rule ID: ITS_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'It is'?
Suggestion: It is
...est Control Company and destroyed food. It’s is possible that other factors contributed...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 256, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lating to not only service feed but also performance. It is entirely possible tha...
^^
Line 9, column 158, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'result'
Suggestion: result
...e evidence that destroyed food does not resulted from other factors, Palm City’s conditi...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, thus, as to, for instance, in short, first of all, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2230.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 417.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34772182254 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73897237067 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.37170263789 0.468620217663 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 679.5 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.5257153884 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.176470588 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5294117647 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 5.70786347227 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.45079220467 0.218282227539 207% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1844601293 0.0743258471296 248% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135704412483 0.0701772020484 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291645522929 0.128457276422 227% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129811191008 0.0628817314937 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 211, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
...Company to Buzzoff Pest Control Company is best choice to save money. However, since th...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 184, Rule ID: ITS_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'It is'?
Suggestion: It is
...est Control Company and destroyed food. It’s is possible that other factors contributed...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 256, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lating to not only service feed but also performance. It is entirely possible tha...
^^
Line 9, column 158, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'result'
Suggestion: result
...e evidence that destroyed food does not resulted from other factors, Palm City’s conditi...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, thus, as to, for instance, in short, first of all, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2230.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 417.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34772182254 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73897237067 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.37170263789 0.468620217663 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 679.5 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.5257153884 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.176470588 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5294117647 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 5.70786347227 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.45079220467 0.218282227539 207% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1844601293 0.0743258471296 248% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135704412483 0.0701772020484 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291645522929 0.128457276422 227% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129811191008 0.0628817314937 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.