The memo sent by the director of the movie production company is not giving a complete picture of what is stated in the memo. There are a lot of questions that needs to be answered before one can arrive at a rational conclusion regarding the matter.
It is said that the according to the recent reports from the marketing team, the number of people attending Super Screen produced movies has atrophied. It begs one to ask how was this report of interest generated? how many theatres were surveyed to arrive at this conclusion? If the number of theatres that is surveyed are a small fraction of the total number of theatres where the movies are screened, the report will definitely be a misleading one. It is also possible that the theatres in which the surveys were taken had other issues like accessibility to general public, theatre conditions etc. were all of these factors taken into consideration too?
Following in the same line of thought comes to the second part where percentage of positive reviews for the movies have claimed to have increased, how was this survey taken? was it done face to face? was it done online? if it was done face to face, what were the number of people who were surveyed? what was the age group of the people who were surveyed? was it fairly targeted across all the age groups? If the survey was taken online, there is a chance that one person who enjoyed the movie a lot could have given multiple positive reviews from different accounts, how are they able to differentiate between multiple feedbacks from the same person? what were the total number of people that were considered for this survey? If it was a small number, then there are chances that they might have got feedback from a sample space where a large fraction of people fortutiously happened to like the movie. if the movie was a youth romance, the teen-adolescent age group would have higher chances of liking it than other age groups. hence, without answers to these questions, it cannot be concluded for sure that the films had positive reviews on the whole.
Later in the memo, it is concluded by the author that the root cause of the problem is that public are not aware such movies are being released. how does the author come to this conclusion? what possible steps has the author taken to come to this conclusion. does he have a research team that has enough data that alludes any rational person to conclude the same as what the director has concluded? If such a report with sufficient data exists, he could have mentioned it in the memo which would have added weight to his argument.
While all the reasons provided in the argument might be true, there is no way to conclude that these are valid reasons until the above questions have been answered to a satisfactory extent at the very least.
Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 496 350
No. of Characters: 2265 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.719 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.567 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.376 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 41.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.033 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.374 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.67 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.125 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 215, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: How
... was this report of interest generated? how many theatres were surveyed to arrive a...
^^^
Line 3, column 561, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... had other issues like accessibility to general public, theatre conditions etc. were all of th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 175, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Was
...e increased, how was this survey taken? was it done face to face? was it done onlin...
^^^
Line 5, column 201, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Was
...survey taken? was it done face to face? was it done online? if it was done face to ...
^^^
Line 5, column 221, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... done face to face? was it done online? if it was done face to face, what were the...
^^
Line 5, column 300, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...the number of people who were surveyed? what was the age group of the people who wer...
^^^^
Line 5, column 356, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Was
... group of the people who were surveyed? was it fairly targeted across all the age g...
^^^
Line 5, column 652, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...ultiple feedbacks from the same person? what were the total number of people that we...
^^^^
Line 5, column 904, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ortutiously happened to like the movie. if the movie was a youth romance, the teen...
^^
Line 5, column 1030, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Hence
...ces of liking it than other age groups. hence, without answers to these questions, it...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 146, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: How
...t aware such movies are being released. how does the author come to this conclusion...
^^^
Line 7, column 191, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...oes the author come to this conclusion? what possible steps has the author taken to ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 260, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Does
...uthor taken to come to this conclusion. does he have a research team that has enough...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, regarding, second, so, then, while, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 41.0 19.6327345309 209% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 11.1786427146 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2319.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 496.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67540322581 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45024550019 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447580645161 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 742.5 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.2851473362 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.76 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.84 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.6 5.70786347227 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150308478266 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447690073312 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0948991987855 0.0701772020484 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0752818360626 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0598565315823 0.0628817314937 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.5979740519 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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