In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author concludes that that cleaning up the Mason River will surely increase its use for recreational activities.He provides several evidences such as, in various suverys the city's residents have ranked water sports among their favourite recreational activities or have given many complaints about the smell of the river.Although the cited evidences seem logical and probable, but the assumptions on which the conclusion relies does not lend credible support to the argument.Hence the argument seems logically unconvincing in several aspects.
Firstly,the author assumes that most of the city's residents take part in various water sports because they have ranked it as their favorite recreational activity.However, the assumption seems irrelevant to the conclusion.It may happen that the residents love to watch various water sports activities, but do not find any interest in being a part of these activities.The author also fails to mention the preferences of the citizens for the water sports over any other activity.Maybe the city has more race tracks and hence the citizens prefer horse riding or in general in land sport over water sports.Further was the survey conducted representative enough? For instance,was it taking into account all the citizens of Mason city or was it focussing only on the citizens who live nearby the river.Thus dues to unrepresentative,small and biased surveys the arguement could be considerably weakened.Thus in order to strengthen the argument, the author should atleast acknowledege the above mention points as well as provide additional and precise information about the survey conducted otherwise the purpose of the argument would be undermined.
In addition to this the author assumes that since the citizens have given many complaints about the smell of the river, therefore this maybe the primary factor responsible for the lack of river's usage.But there maybe other factos that could be attributed to this problem.For exmaple it may happen that the flow of river has increased tremendously and hence the citiznes do not find it safe to either swim or do boating in the river.Further there maybe scanty amount of fishes availaible in the river and hence people have lost their zeal in fishing.Thus dedicating a huge amount of budget for maintaining riverside recreational facilities will be of no use and would go waste.Futher even if it assumed that the smell of the river is the cause for the lack of river's usage then how can it be guaranteed that cleaning up the river is going to help get rid of the smell.It may happen that the smell is originating from some type of mineral present deep inside the river and which cannot be removed because it is beneficial for the health and well being of the aquatic life.Without acknowleding these trivial byt significant aspects,the argument seems misleading.
To sum up,the argument consists of certain obvious fallacies and loopholes.To bolster the argument,the author should have provided more information about the type of survey conducted and its representiveness or, maybe what other factors could be responsible for the lack of the river's usage.However, in the absence of this data, the argument is based on certain doubtful assumptions that render it unconvincing as it stands.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 15 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 544 350
No. of Characters: 2719 1500
No. of Different Words: 251 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.829 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.998 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.668 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 190 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 60.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 30.244 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.889 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.425 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.663 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in addition, in general, such as, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2765.0 2260.96107784 122% => OK
No of words: 519.0 441.139720559 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32755298651 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13286384196 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 204.123752495 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489402697495 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 873.9 705.55239521 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 103.0 22.8473053892 451% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 264.215518091 57.8364921388 457% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 553.0 119.503703932 463% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 103.8 23.324526521 445% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 30.8 5.70786347227 540% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 30.0 5.25449101796 571% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.20758483034 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247416283374 0.218282227539 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137231934342 0.0743258471296 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683377728085 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14864419201 0.128457276422 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0775001194665 0.0628817314937 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 55.6 14.3799401198 387% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -41.53 48.3550499002 -86% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 20.3 7.1628742515 283% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 44.6 12.197005988 366% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.82 12.5979740519 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.58 8.32208582834 151% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 98.500998004 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.5 12.3882235529 246% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 43.2 11.1389221557 388% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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