For a Television station in order to attract more viewers for the program to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, it decides to restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level.
The author claims here that the telivision station should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid loosing any furter advertising contaracts. Stated in this way, the argument reveals several instances of poor reasoning and ill-defined terminology. To justifuy this argument the author reasons that loosing of advertising contracts. However a close look of this evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for author's conclusion. Hence the argument can be cosidered incomplete.
First of all, the argument readily assumes that cancelation of advertising contracts by the local bussinesses is due to loosing of viewers. This is merely an assumption made without much solid ground. For example the cancelation of contracts may be due to the high prices when compared to that of other telivison stations. Hence the argument would have been much more covincing if it explicitly stated that they canceled contract to due to loss of viewers
The author readily claims that loss in viewers is due to the allocating of little time to the weather and local news. This again is a week and unsupported claim as it does not explain any clear relation between them. If the argument had provided the evidence that many people are interested in local or weather news then it would have been lot more convincing. The loss of viewers may be due to the inaccurate weather and local news that have been publishing.
In conclusion the author's argument is unperasive as it stands. To bolster it further the author must provide clear evidence. Finally to better evaluate the argument, it would be necessary to know more information about why the advertising contacters canceled their contract.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 291 350
No. of Characters: 1466 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.13 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.038 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.655 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.188 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.626 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.542 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.066 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 424, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... that loosing of advertising contracts. However a close look of this evidence reveals t...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 535, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...redible support for authors conclusion. Hence the argument can be cosidered incomplet...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 324, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ed to that of other telivison stations. Hence the argument would have been much more ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 19, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...e been publishing. In conclusion the authors argument is unperasive as it stands. To...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 126, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...the author must provide clear evidence. Finally to better evaluate the argument, it wou...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, however, if, look, may, so, then, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1494.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 291.0 441.139720559 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13402061856 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71592911289 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508591065292 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.9077427178 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46666666667 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266731541788 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803627612247 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124263698015 0.0701772020484 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1508725642 0.128457276422 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.096218289345 0.0628817314937 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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