In the above argument, Dr. Field has concluded from his observation that the children of the Tertia were reared by the entire village whereas Dr. karp has just opposed the conclusion by stating that his observations were invalid. Both of the observation have different methodologies and the different time.
Firstly, to begin with, as mentioned in the argument, Dr.Field has done the observation in the Tertia island twenty years ago and at that time, children might have been reared by the entire community. And his observation at that time might have been correct based on the people`s responses and his research. And Dr. Karp has done the observation twenty years after Dr. Field has done and during these time interval , there might have been change in the cultural practices. Previously, there might be dearth of entertainment and people might have been dependent on eachother for the entertainment and twenty years later, there might have been advancement in the source of entertainment and people can independently have the source of entertainment by themselves. So, in this way, the observation might have altered.
Secondly, Dr. Karp has done observation on group of island including Tertia island and the conclusion of his observation is based only on this island. Was his intentions only to defy Dr. Field? No signs of observation of other island is mentioned in the argument. So, he should have mentioned observation of the other island to undergrid his conclusion.
Lastly, lets talk about the methodology used by the Dr.Karp to reach to such conclusion. Was his method more accurate then previous anthropologist? Was his a valiant interviewer ? Does his interview covered every aspects of the research ? All these questions are unanswered in the given argument. And just based on some vacuous observation, the conclusion has been derived.
In sum, there must be some logical way of reaching to the conclusion. Without careful scrutiny, the observation seem like half uncooked food and this creates painstaking situation in digestion. So, with all those unanswered questions and ill-terminology used, we can`t just agree with the conclusion.
Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 346 350
No. of Characters: 1762 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.313 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.092 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.886 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.3 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.574 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.554 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.137 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...he children of the Tertia were reared by the entire village whereas Dr. karp has...
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... by the entire village whereas Dr. karp has just opposed the conclusion by stati...
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...that his observations were invalid. Both of the observation have different method...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, whereas, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1830.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 344.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31976744186 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0220202459 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468023255814 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 66.5090031499 57.8364921388 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298737522847 0.218282227539 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0939054430014 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100643043707 0.0701772020484 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175218619744 0.128457276422 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118155568655 0.0628817314937 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.28 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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