The vice president for human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet inappropriately from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. Installing software on company computers to detect employees' Internet use is the best way to prevent employees from wasting time on the job. It will foster a better work ethic at Climpson and improve our overall profits."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author here has mentioned that employees' productivity can be increased by implementing electronic monitoring of their internet usage. Though the reason mentioned is logical at the first glance, there are some things to be considered before jumping into conclusion.
Though reducing the number of hours spent on personal and recreational activities might increase the productivity of the employee, one has to monitor them for the fact that this time will be properly used for official purposes. If there exist an evidence which shows more time being spent on online games and shopping during work hours, that would strengthen the author's argument.
Moreover, installing software on the company computers to detect employees' Internet use might monitor one's online activities. But there could also be employees who waste time playing offline games during work hours, which might not be detected by the software. There can also other loopholes which once identified, can easily be misused by the employees'. To strengthen or weaken the argument we must have additional information as to; quantify the number of hours used for all the activities in the office.
In addition to that, there is no direct correlation between overall profits and the number of hours spent by the employees'. There could be other ways which can contribute to the profits such as efficient work rather than working for more number of hours.Therefore a presence of a valid, reliable survey depicting the number of hours spent by the employees' in various activities along with the things contributing to the profits of the company is essential to evaluate the given argument.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...g work hours, that would strengthen the authors argument. Moreover, installing softw...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...r than working for more number of hours.Therefore a presence of a valid, reliable survey ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...r than working for more number of hours.Therefore a presence of a valid, reliable survey ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, as to, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 28.8173652695 28% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1395.0 2260.96107784 62% => OK
No of words: 264.0 441.139720559 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28409090909 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77632394232 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556818181818 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 705.55239521 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.100269905 57.8364921388 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.5 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.70786347227 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105843266953 0.218282227539 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499794304648 0.0743258471296 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046718191574 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0712935392669 0.128457276422 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027494919536 0.0628817314937 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => The average readability is low. Need to improve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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