The owner of the cafe provide a strategy to save money and remain on the business. While he assume that this is the best strategy, his argument is weak , and rife with holes.
The owner didn't provide a strong prove for his results. There is no prove that reducing these hours which he suggest will save money. The sales might be higher, and expenses might be less during the hours that he is willing to eliminate. People mainly buy coffee or drink in their way to work, and tend to spend more time out during weekend nights. Also, operation expenses might be less during these hours. Meanwhile, he could strengthen his statement by providing a statical analysis of sales and expenses during hours and days of the business operation. This analysis will provide a righteous result of which hours of operation reveal more profits for the business.
Furthermore, reducing hours of operation might not be the best answer to save money. Business success lay on different reasons, business location, the quantity and the quality of products the business provide. So, the owner would achieve better results if he build his conclusion on comprehensive business analysis to find the real causes of his business loss. He might find that the business location is the problem, or he need to improve his products quality to achieve more practical results.
At the end, while the business owner argument is persuasive, reducing hours of operation may save him money. But further assessment should be carried out to achieve long term success for his business.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 261 350
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 261 350
No. of Characters: 1252 1500
No. of Different Words: 126 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.019 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.797 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.385 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 89 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 18 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.317 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.395 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.568 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.213 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'assumes'.
Suggestion: assumes
...ey and remain on the business. While he assume that this is the best strategy, his arg...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 152, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... the best strategy, his argument is weak , and rife with holes. The owner didnt...
^^
Line 3, column 11, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...eak , and rife with holes. The owner didnt provide a strong prove for his results....
^^^^^
Line 3, column 34, Rule ID: PROVE_PROOF[2]
Message: Did you mean 'proof' (noun) instead of prove (verb)?
Suggestion: proof
...es. The owner didnt provide a strong prove for his results. There is no prove that...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 110, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
...rove that reducing these hours which he suggest will save money. The sales might be hig...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'builds'.
Suggestion: builds
...wner would achieve better results if he build his conclusion on comprehensive busines...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1294.0 2260.96107784 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 260.0 441.139720559 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97692307692 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47795287218 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 204.123752495 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496153846154 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 705.55239521 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.1009292057 57.8364921388 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.2666666667 119.503703932 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 5.70786347227 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131829975366 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0575925336818 0.0743258471296 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633271816853 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0837280943838 0.128457276422 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485475749763 0.0628817314937 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 98.500998004 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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