We need to increase the funding for the movie Working Title by 10% in order to ensure a quality product. As you know, we are working with a first-time director, whose only previous experience has been shooting commercials for a shampoo company. Since the advertising business is notoriously wasteful, it stands to reason that our director will expect to be able to shoot take after take, without concern for how much time is being spent on any one scene. In addition, while we have saved money by hiring relatively inexperienced assistant producers and directors, this savings in salary will undoubtedly translate to greater expenditures in paying the actors and unionized crew overtime for the extra hours they will spend on the set waiting for the assistant directors and producers to arrange things. If we don’t get this extra money, the movie is virtually assured to be a failure
The proposal of the movie producer to increase the funding for the movie Working Title by 10% in order to ensure quality product offers an interesting argument but to move forward it definitely requires more information and thought. The reasons provided by him seems to be logical and probable but there are various hidden factors which needs to be addressed which can lead to a success or failure of the movie.
The first question which needs to be addressed is that although the first-time director has only previous experience of shooting commercials for a shampoo company, it is very much probable that he has got a high experience in terms of number of years. He would have faced and directed several types of actors and would have successfully done his job. This past experience can be handy and might be better than many experienced directors in the movie industry.
The movie producer writes in his memo that advertising business is notoriously wasteful because it takes take after take for one scene. This generalization cannot be done for all directors of advertisements. It is possible that the first-time director for the movie would have different work styles and can finish any advertisements in very less time as compared to others. Same goes for the assistant producers and directors. It can be that production time for movie is much shorter than expected because of the new crew with work experience in advertising sector.The movie producer feels that greater expenditure will be levied on the actors which may or may not be true. His argument is based on the fact that that they will have to put in extra time waiting for the set to be arranged, this may not be true.
Since the producer has never worked with them he cannot doubt their potentials.In conclusion, increasing of funding for the movie by 10% in order to ensure a quality product need not be true because of the reasons mentioned above. One chance needs to be given to this new team and it might be possible that the movie production finishes in a lot lesser time than expected and becomes a blockbuster
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 308 350
No. of Characters: 3499 1500
No. of Different Words: 204 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.158 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.942 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.662 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 210 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 162 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 122 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 93 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 47.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.302 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.569 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.569 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.318 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1495, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experience'.
Suggestion: experience
...ld have successfully done his job. This past experience can be handy and might be better than m...
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Line 1, column 3428, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
...true. His argument is based on the fact that that they will have to put in extra time wai...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4072.0 2260.96107784 180% => OK
No of words: 613.0 441.139720559 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.6427406199 5.12650576532 130% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97582523872 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.54105078636 2.78398813304 163% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.326264274062 0.468620217663 70% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1085.4 705.55239521 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 55.0 22.8473053892 241% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 338.901019217 57.8364921388 586% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 370.181818182 119.503703932 310% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 55.7272727273 23.324526521 239% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.45454545455 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 5.15768463074 19% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0885665874322 0.218282227539 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745973673376 0.0743258471296 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547144156806 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0885665874322 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 37.7 14.3799401198 262% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -1.27 48.3550499002 -3% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.1628742515 222% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.1 12.197005988 222% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 22.12 12.5979740519 176% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 12.3882235529 238% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 24.0 11.1389221557 215% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 11.9071856287 252% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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