The Board of Directors of Nonarch Books recommended that Monarch books open a cafe in its store to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own cafe.
Author cites that Monarch has larger customer base because of its wide selection of books on all subjects.
Author also points out that the space which is require for cafe is made by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular.
For support that, author show that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten.
However, this argument suffer from several critical flaws and also relies on poor assumption and is therefore unpersuasive.
First of all, author assume that if Monarch open cafe in its store, the number of customers are increased without giving any evidence.
It is true that Monarch has a larger customer, but because of its wide collection of books of all subjects.
In this case, author do not give any information about the customers, whether they like coffee or not.
For this author, first, take review of all customers and give the information about them, then his assumption become right.
It is possible that more number of student do not like coffee, so after open the cafe the customers are not increase and author's assumption become false.
So, author must require to give proper information of review and then recommended to open the cafe.
Secondly, the author suggest that the space could be made for cafe by discounting the children's book section.
In this case, the author assume that the population of children under age ten will reduced with using most recent national census.
Author do not give any evidence that prove his poor assumption.
Moreover, author do not mention how many customers are under age ten and how many customers are above age ten in recent.
If the customers, whose ages are under ten, are more than other customers, whose ages are over ten, then it is not appropriate to discontinue the children's book section.
Because of this, number of customers are decrease instead of increase.
So, in this case author require to give statistical information about the customers and their information.
Another problem of this argument is that author claim that after opening cafe, cafe allow Monarch to better compete with Regal Books.
However, without giving any information about Regal Books store author do not assume that.
Perhaps, It is possible that it's most of customers suggest them to open cafe to increase customers and then they open cafe for satisfaction of their customers.
In conclusion, the author's argument is unconvincing as it stands.
The author fails to support argument because of insufficient data, less statistical information.
In order to better evaluate the argument, we would require more clear evidence that prove author's assumption.
To strengthen the argument, the author give more information about liking or disliking of customers and also perfect value of percentage of population of children which are under age ten.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 48, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'required'.
Suggestion: required
...also points out that the space which is require for cafe is made by discontinuing the c...
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Line 12, column 25, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'giving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: giving
... become false. So, author must require to give proper information of review and then r...
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Line 15, column 84, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'reduce'
Suggestion: reduce
...pulation of children under age ten will reduced with using most recent national census....
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Line 20, column 33, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'giving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: giving
...rease. So, in this case author require to give statistical information about the custo...
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Line 24, column 34, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the customers') or simply say ''most customers''.
Suggestion: most of the customers; most customers
...that. Perhaps, It is possible that its most of customers suggest them to open cafe to increase c...
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Line 27, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...heir customers. In conclusion, the authors argument is unconvincing as it stands. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, in conclusion, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 32.0 16.3942115768 195% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2634.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 506.0 441.139720559 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20553359684 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60529782309 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.401185770751 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 826.2 705.55239521 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2780629558 57.8364921388 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 105.36 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.24 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 25.0 5.15768463074 485% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244962027361 0.218282227539 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0895056287504 0.0743258471296 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103654479593 0.0701772020484 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0895056287504 0.128457276422 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103654479593 0.0628817314937 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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