Firstly, a café will not necessarily increase the amount of sells book in the store. It’s necessary to make a research in order to understand how attractive could be the existence of a coffee shop inside the building. Managers should try to understand customers tastes toward it. Buyers might prefer investments in the store related with the book sections itself such as an increase in the amount of books about physics or history, for instance.
Secondly, it’s important to evaluate the consequences in eliminate from the store the children’s book section to replace for the café. While census might demonstrate a reduction in children’s population, this section might be very popular between buyers which can like to take their kids to buy book in the stores. If Monarch Books is well recognized for this book section, then it might attract entire families and this might result in sells made for more than one person, since customers would like to buy books not only for their children but also for themselves. In this sense, to eliminate this book section might result in decrease of sells.
Finally, the Board of Directors argues that a café would help the book store to compete with the Regal Books, since this store already has a coffee shop. However, one should ask “How good is the business after Regal Books opened this café?” Such an investment doesn’t guarantee the business will become more profitable. In the end, a café could be a waste of money since means an investment much more related with food business than book store business. One should analyze if Regal Books is really earning more money after it had opened the coffee shop.
Thus, the Board of Directors of Monarch Books should pay better attention to their assumptions. In order to reinforce the perspectives made it’s necessary to evaluate whether the costumers will enjoy or not the idea; also, the impacts in excluding the children’s book section from the store should be carefully reviewed; finally, it’s important to consider whether is really a good investment or a waste of money to build the café in the store considering the experience of the store who competes with Monarch Books.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the arguments are not on the right track. Here goes a sample:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 367 350
No. of Characters: 1765 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.377 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.809 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.459 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.921 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.366 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.575 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 114, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
... the store. It's necessary to make a research in order to understand how attractive c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1867.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 366.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10109289617 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72274991062 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.464480874317 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.284177273 57.8364921388 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.357142857 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1428571429 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92857142857 5.70786347227 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249971234887 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100562808719 0.0743258471296 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053682162907 0.0701772020484 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158295207304 0.128457276422 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028184982289 0.0628817314937 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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