When Stanley Park first opened, it was the largest, most heavily used public park in town. It is still the largest park, but it is no longer heavily used. Video cameras mounted in the park's parking lots last month revealed the park's drop in popularity: the recordings showed an average of only 50 cars per day. In contrast, tiny Carlton Park in the heart of the business district is visited by more than 150 people on a typical weekday. An obvious difference is that Carlton Park, unlike Stanley Park, provides ample seating. Thus, if Stanley Park is ever to be as popular with our citizens as Carlton Park, the town will obviously need to provide more benches, thereby converting some of the unused open areas into spaces suitable for socializing.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author of the passage tries to find the solution how to bring back the popularity to the Stanley Park. He or she compares two different parks and makes the conclusion that the best way to gain popularity among people is to provide a lot of benches. Perhaps, the proposed measure will bring the lost popularity, however, the author bases his or her argumentation on quite shacky assumptions. Hence, in order to be sure about the conclusion of the text, the assumptions should be analyzed properly, otherwise, the Stanley Park ventures to be forgotten at all.
The given passage states that recently mounted video cameras in the park's parking lots revealed the drop of popularity, it says that it has only 50 cars per day. Conseqeutnly, any reader may conclude that this park is visited people by cars only. However, it is quite strange moment to measure the popularity of the park by number of cars in the lots. Probably, there is few people who visit the park by car, and a lot of people walk to the park. Hence, this assumption should be checked, otherwise, the author of the passage seriously risks to make the wrong decision.
The second point of the text is the information about the Carlton Park which is compared with the Stanley Park. Perhaps, it is not a good idea to compare two parks. Hence, the assumption is that these two parks have the comparable characteristics, for example that Stanley Park is not so big, and it is reasonable to compare it with the Carlton Park. Only, in this case, the author's argumentation will have the solid base.
The last assumption of the text is that the Stanley Park does not have enough benches. Probably, the decision to add more benches in the park may worsen the situation. For example, mostly the Stanley Park is used for jogging and other activities but not for seating on benches. And this measure may undermine the popularity among joggers, because it will not be enough space for jogging.
To sum up, the author tries to find the best solution for the park, however, he or she fails to provide strong arguments for the propsed measure. Hence, the pointed moments should be analyzed properly.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: To sum up, the author tries to find the best solution for the park, however, he or she fails to provide strong arguments for the propsed measure.
Error: propsed Suggestion: proposed
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK, need more: maybe the popularity of Carlton Park is not due to benches.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 375 350
No. of Characters: 1725 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.401 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.6 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.46 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.737 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.365 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.342 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.56 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The author of the passage tries to find ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 377, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...e Carlton Park. Only, in this case, the authors argumentation will have the solid base....
^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'for example', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.24644549763 0.25644967241 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.151658767773 0.15541462614 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0568720379147 0.0836205057962 68% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0592417061611 0.0520304965353 114% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0308056872038 0.0272364105082 113% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0995260663507 0.125424944231 79% => OK
Participles: 0.0284360189573 0.0416121511921 68% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.56624238918 2.79052419416 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0379146919431 0.026700313972 142% => OK
Particles: 0.00473933649289 0.001811407834 262% => OK
Determiners: 0.137440758294 0.113004496875 122% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.021327014218 0.0255425247493 83% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00947867298578 0.0127820249294 74% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2174.0 2731.13054187 80% => OK
No of words: 375.0 446.07635468 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.79733333333 6.12365571057 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.57801047555 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.314666666667 0.378187486979 83% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.242666666667 0.287650121315 84% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.157333333333 0.208842608468 75% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0906666666667 0.135150697306 67% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56624238918 2.79052419416 92% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 207.018472906 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458666666667 0.469332199767 98% => OK
Word variations: 47.9717785938 52.1807786196 92% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.039408867 95% => OK
Sentence length: 19.7368421053 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1697291596 57.7814097925 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.421052632 141.986410481 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7368421053 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.473684210526 0.724660767414 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 44.0035087719 51.9672348444 85% => OK
Elegance: 1.54901960784 1.8405768891 84% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453824280521 0.441005458295 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.152529152947 0.135418324435 113% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0779593543446 0.0829849096947 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.620367743902 0.58762219726 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.149997271312 0.147661913831 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.214879661038 0.193483328276 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0971662298403 0.0970749176394 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.528935487191 0.42659136922 124% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0778388883593 0.0774707102158 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.336184211486 0.312017818177 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0838054442633 0.0698173142475 120% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.82389162562 177% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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