The Wildlife reserve has sold some of its lands to The Smith Corporation. The Smith corporation wants to build a small hotel with a plan and promises not to harm the scuntary. The Environment protecting society has sent a letter to residents stating not to permit to build a hotel. The society says what if the Smith Corporation does not stay with promise? Tourist visit wildlife preserve for the immense number of birds population. This might decrease the population of birds.
I completely agree with the given statement that the permission to develop on the land which is the part of Wildlife Preserve. The author, here, states the probable consequences if any construction takes place over the sold piece of land. Also, the author clarifies that they might not stick with what they are promising currently about preservation of the sanctuary. The author imagines what would it result if The Smith Corporation is allowed to do as per their plan.
From the authors point of view, constructing small hotel not only generates the physical building but also brings other aspects into effect. The hotel can be defined as the building built for the purpose of providing the service to stay or eat. In beginning, it might only be as per the plan however it might get modified with the flow of time. The Smith corporation might analyze the intention of the person who visits the hotel. Smith corporation might conclude that the numbe of visitors may grow if any entertainment source are included. Thus, the corporation might end up with the musical system; further with loud sound of music. This might be entertainment source for visitors but not for the habitats of the Wildlife preserve.
The intention of Smith corporation might be something like invasion; the hotel might be built within the purchased area of land but might use the area belonging to the Wildlife preserve. This situation will lead to destruction of the habitat of animals and birds that used to stay to the location nearby hotel. This destruction will lead to decline in number of birds and animals. The hotel may not create the condition that suits the well living of the creates.
Almost all the consequences after allowing to build hotel are against the wildlife preserve as this with end up creating unfavourable living condition of the wildlives and then decline in number of wild creates. The purpose for which tourists visit will be no more the reason. Not only these mentioned effects are limited but there are huge numbers of other possible effects of building the hotel.
In final worlds, the construction of hotel will bring drastic change in the habitat of the wildlives over the time which will deteriote the surviving condition of wild animals as well as it might eradicate some of the species.
Comments
e-rater score report
Out of topics
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 1876 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.823 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.539 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.474 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.961 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.385 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.082 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 308, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...hat they might not stick with what they are promising currently about preservation of the san...
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Line 5, column 44, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'building'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: building
...ost all the consequences after allowing to build hotel are against the wildlife preserve...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 207, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...d animals as well as it might eradicate some of the species.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, then, thus, well, after all, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 389.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92030848329 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5836537087 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47557840617 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.132662714 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.736842105 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4736842105 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78947368421 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224702939618 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708587827326 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486420843624 0.0701772020484 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119070704959 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0575782567723 0.0628817314937 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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