Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
The author argues that recently, archaeologist discovered a Palean basket in Litho which have previously been found only in the Palea. This basket could have been transferred to Litho only by boat, but no Palean boats have been found. So it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. However, the argument does not give strong evidence to prove the conclusion and is flawed for several reasons.
Firstly, the effects of climatic change have not been properly investigated. The author claims that the Brim River is very deep and broad while no evidence has shown how it looked in the past. Climate change affects precipitation, the Brim River might be seasonal when the water level in the river bed had gone down, and people were crossing the river. However, genesis history of the river is unclear; there isn't enough valid and reliable information about the geography of the region. It is possible the old river bed wasn’t as wide as the new one, so people could have crossed by wooden floating board. The archaeologists should use more available techniques in data collection and analysis that can have a direct impact on the results.
Secondly, the author has stated that the only transportation way was by boats which based on the evidence was seems it was impossible too; maybe the Palean people had other types of transportation to have crossed the land. Humans began walking long distances around million years ago; the Palean peoplen could have walked to reach Lithos. Also, they might have had horses, which made travel easier, allowing people to meet each other and trade. Although, the inhabitants might use the Palean basket as a shopping box, making a rope railing on both sides of the river, hanging the Palean basket on the rope, exchanging food, fruit, and other required supplies from within the baskets, as a result the baskets were moved to Lithos.
In summary, the author has made some assumptions that need to have been proved. To further strengthen this argument, needs to give evidence as follows; first, the author consider river's conditions at the past; second, investigate more about Litho people, and try to find if they had boat or not; third, the archaeologists just discovered such a "Palean" basket in the Litho that maybe brought in Lithos by river or wind chanceful; and in the end, the archaeologists should investigate about any tools people Litho could have made a basket to prove the Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 419 350
No. of Characters: 2015 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.524 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.809 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.466 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.503 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.513 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.08 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
... history of the river is unclear; there isnt enough valid and reliable information a...
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Line 7, column 343, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the archaeologists just discovered such a 'Palean' basket in the Litho...
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Line 7, column 345, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...he archaeologists just discovered such a 'Palean' basket in the Litho ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ht in Lithos by river or wind chanceful; and in the end, the archaeologists sho...
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Line 7, column 447, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Lithos by river or wind chanceful; and in the end, the archaeologists should i...
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Line 7, column 460, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ver or wind chanceful; and in the end, the archaeologists should investigate ab...
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Suggestion:
...igate about any tools people Litho could have made a basket to prove the Palean b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, while, in summary, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2099.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 417.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03357314149 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6170267195 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52278177458 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 109.419473101 57.8364921388 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.1875 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0625 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.70786347227 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28234162816 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106335191802 0.0743258471296 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10286930003 0.0701772020484 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193105201475 0.128457276422 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116213734302 0.0628817314937 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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