Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
The writer of this analytical piece has drawn the optimistic conclusion, from disjointed and incomplete data. While it may true that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean, the authors' argument does not make a cogent case. It is easy to understand that Palean baskets founded in Lithos and no Palean boats were founded in Brim River so it should not be unique, but In this argument, there are ample assumptions and holes, and thus, not strong enough to lead to the conclusion that Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
The author mentioned a broad statement that "Palean" baskets have previously been found only near the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore believed to have been made only by the Palean people. It is not clear, however, the scope and validity of this leave a lot of space for doubts. For example, was there any kind of workshop founded in Palean which asserts that it should only be made by the Palean people? It can not be always true that if baskets are founded there then it must be made by Palean people. It may have been transported to those places. Maybe some people of Palean imported those baskets from somewhere else. We just do not know. Unless it is fully representative, valid and reliable, it can not be used to effectively back to the author's argument.
Additionally, the author claims that archaeologists discovered such palean baskets in Lithos. Though there have been baskets we do not know that it is imported from Palean only. It may have been imported from any other places where baskets were made. Not only that but it also may be possible that Lithos people were imitating the art of making baskets and such founded basket may be imitated Lithos one. We can not corroborate anything surely. To strengthen his/her argument, the author would benefit from implementing that the evidence was discovered by archaeologists that founded basket was only imported from Palean itself.
Building upon the implication that the river is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. The author suggests that thus Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. For example, baskets were made in palean then there should be some way to avail transport to Lithos, In this case, the way is not founded so it may not be unique. But what if there were no such river exists at the time of such palean baskets were transported from Palean to Lithos. it also may have been possible there are different routes of transport other than the river or maybe the depth and width of the river may not be such deep and broad at that time. Consequently, boats not founded have no impact on the uniqueness of Palean basket. The author does not effectively show the connection between Palean boats, river, and the uniqueness of palean boats.
In general, it may be said that the writer has failed to make a convincing argument because of the complete absence of proper data. No convincing reasoning is given. The argument ends with an entirely unjustified optimistic conclusion based on observations that are likely to be incorrect. Thus, the author's argument not likely significantly persuades that the "Palean" baskets were not uniquely palean.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 555 350
No. of Characters: 2635 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.854 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.748 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.47 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 185 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.435 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.593 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.49 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...n baskets were not uniquely Palean, the authors argument does not make a cogent case. I...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 765, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... not be used to effectively back to the authors argument. Additionally, the author...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 95, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...scovered such palean baskets in Lithos. Though there have been baskets we do not know ...
^^^^^^
Line 13, column 523, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...were transported from Palean to Lithos. it also may have been possible there are d...
^^
Line 17, column 301, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...t are likely to be incorrect. Thus, the authors argument not likely significantly persu...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, in general, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 43.0 19.6327345309 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 28.8173652695 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2733.0 2260.96107784 121% => OK
No of words: 554.0 441.139720559 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93321299639 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85151570047 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65198086632 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.395306859206 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 856.8 705.55239521 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.8375076911 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6071428571 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7857142857 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89285714286 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326841231626 0.218282227539 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104626133831 0.0743258471296 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108729527043 0.0701772020484 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204804548469 0.128457276422 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111542212576 0.0628817314937 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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