The following appeared in a memo by the Mayor in the city of Hillview:
" In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill which is undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking the city council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer significant tax incentives to make our towm attractive to this giant of car manufacturing"
The author of this argument states that to improve the employment scenario in Hillview, they should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in Hillview. He states that the landfill site would be perfect for this plant since it has been underdeveloped for decades. He adds that Autotech would provide work to thousands after Computech company abandoned tham last year. He states that authorizing a lerge campaign along with significant tax incentives would make Hillview attractive to the giant company Autotech. I disagree with the author's conclusion that Hillview's unemploym...
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Sentence: He adds that Autotech would provide work to thousands after Computech company abandoned tham last year.
Error: tham Suggestion: them
Sentence: A lot of prolems can arise on the site.
Error: prolems Suggestion: problems
Sentence: He assumes that organising a large campaign and providing tax incentives would make Autotech come to Hillview.
Error: organising Suggestion: organizing
Sentence: Maybe Autotech needs civil engineers and mechanical egineers which Hillview cannot provide.
Error: egineers Suggestion: engineers
Sentence: Ultimately, the author can strenghten his argument by proving that the landfill site is perfect for construction purposes.
Error: strenghten Suggestion: strengthen
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