There is now evidence that the relaxed pace of life in small towns promotes better health and greater longevity than does the hectic pace of life in big cities. Businesses in the small town of Leeville report fewer days of sick leave taken by individual w

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There is now evidence that the relaxed pace of life in small towns promotes better health and greater longevity than does the hectic pace of life in big cities. Businesses in the small town of Leeville report fewer days of sick leave taken by individual workers than do businesses in the nearby large city of Masonton. Furthermore, Leeville has only one physician for its one thousand residents, but in Masonton the proportion of physicians to residents is five times as high. Finally, the average age of Leeville residents is significantly higher than that of Masonton residents. These findings suggest that people seeking longer and healthier lives should consider moving to small communities.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The author in the passage concludes that if people who wish to live long and healthy must live in small communities like Leeville. The author makes assumption that people taking fewer sick leaves can be a measurement tool for assessing that people are healthy. He further assumes that few physicians are an indication of healthy people in Leeville.The author uses vague term ‘significantly high’ without stating how many years more than Masonton residents.

The author states that people of Leeville take fewer sick leaves than people of Masonton.The author assumes that fewer sick leave can be used to asses that people of Leeville town are healthy. This assumption cannot be completely true because the number of sick leaves an individual gets by businesses in Leeville may be fewer compared to Masonton businesses. Just based on sick leave the author cannot conclude that people of Leeville are healthy.

The author presents in the passage that Leevile has 1 physician for very 1000 residents, but Masonton has 5 times higher. The author makes another assumption that fewer physicians are an indication of healthy people and longer life. The assumption is flawed because the number of physicians being fewer in small communities may be for many reasons because of financial situations in the Leeville town. Masonaton town is bigger and has more opportunity for the physicians so more physicians settle in town.The number physicians living in town cannot serve as sign of healthy people.

The author finally states that residents of small communities like Leeville live significantly longer than that of Masonton residents. The author uses vague term significantly high and does not provide specifically how many more years long does a person can live if he lives in small communities. Without giving details about the number years the author cannot make assumption that people can live longer in small town.

The passage can be strengthened with more evidences like stating exactly the number of leaves given by small town and comparing it with large communities like Masonton. He should also provide evidence of financial situations and the demography of the small communities to compare. He should specifically state how many years more people can live if moved to small communities. The author should provide more details about the healthier life style followed by small communities .However, the author makes assumption about small communities and concludes that to live longer and healthier people should live in small communities.

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