No one can deny that art is crucial for any society as a way of entertainment, but there are many things in life more than arts to develop the country and the citizen's life. It is my firm belief the human needs the elemental requirements to live the life then looking for the additional requirements such as arts and sports for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, every country must provide the basis for their citizens such as teaching them or their kids, healing by building hospitals and recruiting qualifed persons, and providing food and work to beat the awkwardness circumstances. On top of that, if the country made all these requirements, then it could spend money to the additional recreations such as festivals, songs and atrs in general. However, many examples in the world for sountries which have a high willingness and intreset in arts without dealing with citizens in the right way or without help them to live the life in suitable way. As a result, the civilization will decline and the citizens will hate their officials and country.
Second, as we know everyone has his own priorities and the majority of people need work to make money and purchase the requirments for his family. On top of that, if someone don't have a job and he has kids, so he needs to do any thing to feed them such as steal to obtain his compulsory requirments. However, if the country stop provide the fund to the arts and transfer it to poor people or people have terrible circumstances, then the percentage of crimes will decline because those people have the basics to live which are food, water and house. Moreover, in some countries arts is a way to make a profit because the country does not have natural sources such as oil, such as lebanon, in this way the country use this art to make festivals and attract tourists, so jobs will be available.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that nations should prohibited any type of funding to entertainment unless every citizen has home and job to give the human passion to provide all the power he has to build and develop the country which will reflect in all the citizens and next generations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'citizens'' or 'citizen's'?
Suggestion: citizens'; citizen's
...han arts to develop the country and the citizens life. It is my firm belief the human ne...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in the world for sountries which have a high willingness and intreset in arts wi...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... his family. On top of that, if someone dont have a job and he has kids, so he needs...
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Message: Did you mean 'anything'?
Suggestion: anything
... job and he has kids, so he needs to do any thing to feed them such as steal to obtain hi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, moreover, second, so, then, as to, in conclusion, in general, such as, as a result, to begin with, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.5258426966 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 388.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68298969072 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66324174147 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 23.0359550562 152% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.1569497536 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.181818182 118.986275619 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.2727272727 23.4991977007 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4545454545 5.21951772744 239% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180971853356 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706802559163 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395531744662 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11358973248 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256648635422 0.0667264976115 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 14.1392134831 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 48.8420337079 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.46 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.8971910112 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.2143820225 143% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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